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Storm Within |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind 
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There’s a storm Inside Swelling, full of anger. With no control The anger becomes a snake Erratic and swift. From fear of what may come I cower In the acreage of my self. Shame envelopes me It’s power overbearing Kissing my wet cheeks. This is for one of my college courses. Is it worthy, or should I work on it some more? [This message has been edited by mariee66 (edited 11-15-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Great descriptions of anger...I think it's fine the way it is, but if you want to add more to it, it's up to you. Elizabeth |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is very well done. . . I feel that it needs no more work. . . Thank you for sharing. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nicely described |
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