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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The Softest Heart Not a soft touch, no, and not of soft mind. But a soft heart, yes, she is that, all of the time. She willingly steels herself against the crafter, the one that would be her master, but she ultimately gleams against anyone who might contrive, or would steal her dreams. She knows she has a very soft heart, and that in itself the devil would impart a willingness to hear the voices of the family now lost, if she had her choice. But they are gone, and it is for them that she longs, for in all this great while, she feels as if she does not belong… anywhere. In that, she's scared. But her heart remains soft. Her soul stays aloft for most and for them. Sometimes she wonders at the where and the when. She would visit "where" most when critical, and found "when" to be a hard pill. She could not swallow, nor could she lend, but a candle to tallow, and a will that would bend toward destiny for her and she. She wants most to allow the ghost to live to give and give but the spirit of the day does not allay the softness of her heart so the steel becomes her eyes of green the steel becomes a golden sheen the steel becomes her heart of give O but for the soft she would live and for it one man could enter, one man could come in and splinter one man could tear it all apart the one man that had her heart Not a soft touch, no, and not of soft mind. But soft heart, yes, she is this, all of the time. She willingly steels herself against the crafter, the one that would be her master, but she ultimately gleams against anyone who might contrive, or would steal her dreams. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is so soooooooo amazing, you know how I love your work, and this is stunningly well written. Utterly utterly wonderful, I love it. just WOW Take care Majestic Mushy M I'm gobsmacked (Such an inelegant expression but descibes me exactly)  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Karilea, Well worded, well constructed, well written. Enjoyed. Sy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"a willingness to hear the voices of the family now lost, if she had her choice. But they are gone, and it is for them that she longs, for in all this great while, she feels as if she does not belong… anywhere. In that, she's scared." Perhaps because this was not repeated - it is why I noticed and love it more - thoughts and feelings I know well Beautiful Karilea |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
karilea-- wow! this is simply and utterly amazing. some of your most beautiful work to date. but then again in my opinion all of your poetry is wonderful. you bring some lovely feelings out on page and make a person really feel what you are writing. loved this, i did! take care... ~amy~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know this soft heart of which you speak.. I hope this one man will find and treasure your soft heart...James |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
Beautiful, emotive writing, Sunshine. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, had to come back, this is so amazingly good. I really really love this one. (Oh and Kari, I know my strange Kent terms can be confusing, gobsmacked, means struck dumb, literally smacked in the mouth  )I forget that you don't all live here sometimes, I'm sorry. Take care Majestic Mushy M  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, I adore the word "gobsmacked!"... Sy, well, well, well...I am so glad you came in to read! That pleases me most...{~,^} Mr. Yeats, sometimes I feel the repeat of a rhythm's words intensive the moment...and other times, once said is enough...thank you... Amy, aren't you simply and utterly amazing! Thank you so much for coming in to read!... James, of course you do...you own it... Rainydays, "emotive" says quite a lot...thank you... Marsha...I STILL like "gobsmacked!..." I knew it had to be special!...thank you!... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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