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The Fall (inspired by the whether)
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The Fall (inspired by the whether) |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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Night's dark mood casts black spectors Throughout the enchanted realm. A warrior dons, as if for battle, Morning start, shield and helm. Saddling dark mare, fiery spirited, He rides out into hellacious din. White robed sorcerers with hooded heads Stand before demons, created from dark sin. With a shout and clinking spurs The warrior charges for the clashing. Magic fringes battle field As devils rush forward, claws slashing. Collision unseen by mere mortals before, Warrior meets monster in epic fight. Morning star drinks its fill of blood, Master swinging on through the night Clearing away hordes of grisly beings. Lightning strikes from cloudless sky As paladin gauntlet glows with fury, Ripping through demonlings who fight nearby. Sorcerers raise their cloaked hands, Summoning dark magic to bring the kill Of one mere man who has conquered many, Who fights with fury, and drives by will. Stars swirl in enchanted frenzy, Moving the earth and water's border. Green light glows with mist approaching, Moving the demons into fiery disorder. Paladin stops short, morning star ceasing, As a hush falls over his realm. Silent death seeps over monster and demon; Quiet reigns emperor, instilling its deathly calm. Bodies lay thick as the magic approaches; Black horse snorts angrily, but unmoving, While Paladin watches as death draws near. Green mist envelops the grand duo; killing. Ten black sorcerers walk away in victory, Knowing for certain their task has been completed. Evil will own this now unprotected realm, Since the great Paladin has finally been defeated. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You are not without your puzzles either..but I do know that I love this: "Morning star drinks its fill of blood, Master swinging on throught the night..." awesome in the allegory. Loved it. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Masked Intruder, this is interesting, challenging and very, very good. be well Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like that title very interesting write and very well written. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you're awesome!!! damn...!! your writing soars!! very fine stuff here, MI  |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Masked~ I can't say I understand what this has to do with the weather, but I can say I enjoyed this poem very much......very alive and very vivid in my mind.  -SEA |
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Masked Intruder
Moderator
Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Serenity- The pen is not mightier than the morning star in this case, eh. One of my favorite weapons, I first read about it in a fantasy series by R.A Salvatore. Kethry- Thanks for the kind words. Oh, and, wellness is only a state of mind. *wink* ethome- I changed the title from its intial "Evil's Night" to "The Fall." I didn't think that the former was as dramatic as "The Fall." Doreen- thanks bunches, hun. My writing might be soaring, but it's still yet to reach the altitude of yours. Love ya. SEA- Not the "weather," silly. The "whether." What would happen if the bad guy won? It's inspired by the what if of it all. |
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