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Lonesome of the Heart.................
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Lonesome of the Heart................. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Lonesome of the Heart ‘tis nothing at all akin to fairness this lonesome of the heart sharp sting, vague ache this heart it breaks still beats therein this lonesome of the heart all around you love resplendent lies still sunshine comes from hie the skies the birds they sing twittering merrily like an old song now a lost rhapsody faint is the call of violin’s play down long hall this lonesome of the heart pensive yearning no one’s learning from this, this lonesome of the heart ‘twill never be better as there is no other end ‘tis forlorn it is, my friend this lonesome of the heart so I will wait so you won’t know in winter’s gale we shall take a walk while we silently talk the bitter frozen air my tears shall meet and match my soul’s sigh you won’t see it ‘tis nothing at all akin to fair this lonesome of the heart vague stinging ache breaks heart rare but still will beat therein in the lonesome of the heart Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ this is so painful and deeply sad to me.......made my heart ache......excellent write.  - SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
The lonesome of the heart will beat for the lonesome of heart. . . Tender and delicate my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is one beautiful achy breaky heart poem, and I love it. Utterly wonderful, you've written this so well. Excelled your usual excellance, marvellous. Oh and I love it, you can tell I know. (There's no fooling you is there, sharp as a tack  )Take care love Mushy Marsha with a little bit of Majestic thrown in Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA...it IS sad, isn't it...? Sven, thank you... Marsha...you insatiable thing, you! Hugs, Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~ Oh ... visions of Hank Williams, Sr. I'm So Lonesome I Could Cry ... 'faint is the call of violin’s play down long hall this lonesome of the heart' Sad and lovely ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Sad yes, but beautifully done. "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marge, you know the sound that a violin makes when it tugs just so on your heart and you tense at the feel?...someday, I'm going to capture that very feeling in word...just for you... EagleOne, where HAVE you been!? So GLAD to see you, and so very happy to know that you felt this as I have...thank you! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lovely phrasing in this sad but wonderful poem Liz |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Elizabeth, thank you for your kind response... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Lonesome of th heart is such a beautil phrase....and you build on it expertly |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Sunshine, I am surprised this one has not been viewed more times though I confess I've read it twice already so here I am with an overdue reply post...  It's lovely just like you Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 11-07-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I could cry, so sad and so exactly how I feel, is your poem. "tis nothing at all akin to fair this lonesome of the heart" You express this feeling perfectly. Sandra |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Are you taking up writing C/W songs now? Wonderfully done! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Karilea, such a sad, beautiful poem. I felt every word, every phrase. Loved it. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
If I could - I'd capture those frozen tears in a vial- and keep them safe - to give you on that day - and it will be soon - for i'm a believer -when I can return them to you with a bouquet in celebration of a new-found love - returned to you a hundred fold as you walk that aisle melting the candles with your smile. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great writing, Sunshine! Wonderful expression! Denise |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh gosh, look what I missed in answering... 'Deer, I'm going to get me a license of architecture to build wonderful poems...and then work on them every day...thank you... Coco, do you think folks would read it more if I bumped it up by replying timely? LOL...thank you... Cat, please, give me a smile through the tears...please?... PdV...why? Do you think I could make a million? Want to corroborate?...or is that collaborate?... Thank you Dee... Mr. Yeats, your responses keep getting better and better... thank you denise!.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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