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Playing the Savior (finished) |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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In a life where it s so cold I lived like a prosthetic Christ Trust in me we loved ourselves Drained we loved each other I felt your skin again I fell in you again Why I m always twisting and turning running and burning dead and dying for you and you and you again I have seen what none have seen I have held in you what none have held Sometimes I dream like a kid in school But your lectures were killing me killing off imagination It is true I want to be a part of you melt into you Some say you ve been here before covered in ash like a run a way dream crying laughing at cool depression bearing down on you with automatic intentions Follow me down I ll take you down I m going down Come with me down We are all going down We had it all like Christ on the cross but we never saw the nails We never felt the thorns It is strange how we can be so oblivious while slitting our own thoughts with thoughts of preservation We felt so dead just before we felt pride [This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 11-06-2000).] |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Ummm, I can't really describe this but it's very abstract, sad, and it's a brilliant poem! Take care! Nathan |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~E,...you must know that you have loads of talent. I am always appropriately pleased when I see a post by you. You never let me down. Your words here, hold much meaning and scurry off the page to the reader. Very heavy, and full of depth. Thanks for the read you. *Peace. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very deep moving and intense poetry...very very well done!! off the wall but with a purpose....enjoyed the read very much!! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Thanks for the support. I guess this is a bit strange. Oh well. |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Sometimes we do sacrifice ourselves for love(nailed to the cross) and don't realise it(or we do...is the pleasuer worth the pain?). Love love's a martyr. good work. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
You're right love does require sacrifice and sometimes it doesn't. Is pain worth the pleasure? |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
 we'll try this again. Just in case anyone missed it. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I'm glad you gave this a second run through...never enough time in the day is there! This is awesome work...you giving me much to think on today...and I'm lovin it!! The format truly added to the poem...left an impressionable mark on the work....great job! |
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