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Rhiannon
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since 1999-07-28
Posts 95
Fayetteville, TN USA

0 posted 2000-11-05 06:50 PM



      The loss I feel is nothing but
      An afterthought
      To the love you've given me
      I've never felt so much of something
      So much but
      Now I wish I could be
      More to you.

      I've dreamt of us together since
      I've known
      That you could love me too
      And it's been everything I hoped
      Everything, soon
      I can be
      More to you.

      I've held your hand in hard times
      I hoped
      I could help you and get you through
      Then I realized you had to help yourself
      It's helped, although
      Maybe my help one day it will mean
      More to you.

      I've kissed your tears away-
      Kissed your trembling lips as they
      Spoke words that touched my heart.
      I've known the secrets of your past
      You've trusted me with the darkest parts.
      I've loved you beyond anything I've felt
      I've given my heart, my body, my words
      My beloved, I'm afraid I can't be much
      More to you.

© Copyright 2000 Rhiannon - All Rights Reserved
Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
Posts 925

1 posted 2000-11-05 06:55 PM


you have given all here as expressed, and everything you are...very well written.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-11-05 07:22 PM


Very nice...James
Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

3 posted 2000-11-05 08:48 PM


My beloved, I'm afraid I can't be much
More to you.

Rhiannon, after all you have given, true, you can't be much more.

Loved it  

Maree

"If my words could blanket the skies
and fill every corner and crevice of
this earth, still this won't be enough"
"Maree Russo"

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16
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4 posted 2000-11-05 09:14 PM


Very touching write, Rhiannon!  Liked it a lot!!

sp  

I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me...

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-11-05 09:19 PM


Rhiannon~
A lovely write ... of giving all ...

'I've dreamt of us together since
I've known
That you could love me too
And it's been everything I hoped'


and receiving ...

Doesn't get much better than this.
~*Marge*~


      



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Rhiannon
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since 1999-07-28
Posts 95
Fayetteville, TN USA
6 posted 2000-11-05 09:24 PM


thank you everyone for your lovely posts   all feedback is appreciated, especially good feedback.
love
leslie

Mick Hawkes
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since 2000-10-26
Posts 90
Tees-side , England
7 posted 2000-11-05 09:25 PM


It struck a cord "inside".......
i know the feling well....

Mick


A smile a day helps you work , rest & play.

Rhiannon
Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 95
Fayetteville, TN USA
8 posted 2000-11-09 05:45 PM


Thank you all!
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