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Wilfred Yeats
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0 posted 2000-11-03 11:04 PM


A warm fall breeze lifts the leaves
Exposing their alternate color
Softly on my skin -I feel your presense
Waking dormant feelings I can't ignore
Spreading goosebumps raising hairs
It will soon be prickles giving foretaste
Of passion always to come

I'm standing in a shallow pool
Under the waterfall that is you
Filling this empty vessel that is me
Rinsing me clean
Washing away my iniquities
I feel I will burst

Ripples spread across the pool
Cones of leaves twirl across the meadow
Trees shedding, bending in a fall ballet
A hint of smoke, and cider fill the scented air
You across the many states are here with me
Oh yes - you are here
I feel you in each tiny drop
Cascading from my arms
And in each wafted breeze
That carries your scent

I turn and embrace the water's fall
Let its fluid rush conceive substantial you
The liquid flow runs through my skies
All the rainbows I see
Are sparkles from your eyes

The spilling spirit you my aqua vitae
Ponce De Leon has found his fountain now
Becomes my skin and enters in
Akin we are despite so far I feel you deep within
I imagine you can feel me as I feel you

So we cavort in water stained with fall
Tannin brown from leaves withal
Sharing kisses wet and glorious
Were we seen we'd be notorious
And thus I smile first time today
And whisper words you'd have me say
As into rhyme our speech falls easy
Laughter in our talk so breezy

For all I am when I'm with you
For all that's good that in me you imbue
I'm giving thanks to you nightly
And equal thanks to the almighty
You fill my heart you fill my soul
My very lungs you do control
You're in the air I draw each breath
There you'll stay until my death
My mold sincere with Latin meaning
In you I find all love I'm gleaning
Then like two geese we gently nest
Forever mated we take our rest


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Things which matter most must never be at the mercy of things
which matter least.

          ~ Johann Wolfgang Von Goethe ~


[This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 11-03-2000).]

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Ron K. Fox
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since 2000-10-24
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1 posted 2000-11-03 11:12 PM


That is one beautiful poem Wilfred, you make it hard to chose a favorite. the visions are so vivid, painted with autumns colors, crisp, inviting. Excellent again, my friend.

Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox


Alle'cram
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2 posted 2000-11-03 11:38 PM


Ahhh! ~so romantic and lovely~ Beautiful!

I love the word "cavort". Loved this poem. Marcy

nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2000-11-04 12:12 PM


Very Lovely  thoughts you penned  Wil.

~Wynter Bliss


"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II



Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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4 posted 2000-11-04 12:20 PM


Ah, Wil (I have an English cousin with your name, and he goes by that nick-name),  how can I tell you how you touched my heart with this poem!?!  Exquisite imagery!  Beautiful poem!  Thank you for sharing!


Martie
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5 posted 2000-11-04 12:44 PM


Bill--You touch my heart with the fall of color and the deep feelings that come from this lovely poem of imagery and heart.  Well done!
ethome
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6 posted 2000-11-04 12:51 PM


Wilfred that's a heavy longing you got going there and it's full of love...such yearning through a cascade of metaphors...word pictures swirling everwhere through the reader's mind's eye...It seems that a lot of your heart went into this and it was worth the effort...I really enjoyed the read.... ...ethome
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-11-04 01:15 AM


Wilfred~
*Sigh*
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 2000-11-04 01:18 AM


Sir Poet Bill* You cause a woman to *swoon*
by the mere touch of your pen...what a
beautiful enchanting weave...I'll simply
give Marge a BIG ditto on that *sigh*!!  

CocoBaci
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9 posted 2000-11-04 01:18 AM


Wilfred, a lovely write and a most enjoyable read

Coco

Paula Finn
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missouri
10 posted 2000-11-04 02:58 AM


Bill I love this...the images and flavors...water pouring over you...rainbows floating in the air...cider flavored kisses...wonderful
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 2000-11-04 05:40 AM


"Trees shedding, bending in fall ballet"
My favorite line of this poem but not my favorite thought. There's lots of romance swirling around in those leaves
Beautiful
Liz

Wilfred Yeats
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12 posted 2000-11-04 09:24 AM


Perhaps I should offer each of you individual thanks - but I hope you'll forgive me for a blanket one this time.
Let me say how grateful I am for for your warm replies and generous support of my efforts at writing poetry. I hope to always be at least as deserving as I am trying to be at this moment. So a big Mwahhhhhhhhhhhh kiss thrown to you all!  

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
13 posted 2000-11-04 06:08 PM


Could you, for a moment, quit being so GOOD? You might drive this woman to drink!  Wow...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



Janet Marie
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14 posted 2000-11-04 06:23 PM


So we cavort in water stained with fall
Tannin brown from leaves withal
Sharing kisses wet and glorious
Were we seen we'd be notorious
And thus I smile first time today
And whisper words you'd have me say
As into rhyme our speech falls easy
Laughter in our talk so breezy

For all I am when I'm with you
For all that's good that in me you imbue
I'm giving thanks to you nightly
And equal thanks to the almighty
You fill my heart you fill my soul
My very lungs you do control
You're in the air I draw each breath
There you'll stay until my death
My mold sincere with Latin meaning
In you I find all love I'm gleaning
Then like two geese we gently nest
Forever mated we take our rest
================
WOWOWOWOW...
this is captivating..
superb use of imagery and metaphors Will
they enhance the longing and anticipation
with grace,,,
this is excellent poet sir...
those 2 geese....(lucky ducks me thinks)  
later-apple-cider-gator
jm

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15 posted 2000-11-04 09:43 PM


Excellent sir. . . they should always bring out the best in us. . . and we, in them. . .

Superb. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Wilfred Yeats
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Wilmington, Delaware
16 posted 2000-11-04 10:45 PM


Karilea -
Pour me a Glenfidych on the rocks - I'll join you ~S~ - thanks

Janet Marie-
reading replies from you is always always a most uplifting experience - If I'm any good at all it comes from the inspiration I find here and you're a principle source

Sven -
I'm so grateful I've found one who is - Thank you

Balladeer
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17 posted 2000-11-04 10:54 PM


under the waterfall that is you....

There are so many lines in this one I wish I had written! Beautiful and very touching, Bill.

Sunshine
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18 posted 2000-11-04 11:07 PM


'tis done, but I cannot compete with Janet...so enjoy...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound.
KRJ



Wilfred Yeats
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19 posted 2000-11-04 11:17 PM


'deer-
High praise I call it from one whos poetry
I admire so greatly

Karilea-
I toast a poet -(you) who should feel no competition - as you write some of the most beautiful poetry I read here

Gentle Spirit
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20 posted 2000-11-04 11:22 PM


Bill I am so glad to again see you smile, and wish only the best for you.  Your writing is truly beautiful.  *s*
Wilfred Yeats
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Wilmington, Delaware
21 posted 2000-11-05 11:40 AM


Gentle Spirit -
that goes back to you double - we've both had some riugh times - but yu've survived veautifully - and I'm proud of your resiliance Thank you

snowpants
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22 posted 2000-11-05 11:44 AM


'You across the many states are here with me
Oh yes - you are here
I feel you in each tiny drop
Cascading from my arms
And in each wafted breeze
That carries your scent'

Oh, wow, Mr. Yeats!  You got me with these wonderful lines!  I truly loved this one!!

sp  

Do not go where the path may lead, but instead, go where there is no path and leave a trail. - Ralph Waldo Emerson

Wilfred Yeats
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23 posted 2000-11-05 03:04 PM


Snowpants
(secret: - my fav verse too) Thank you glad you liked it too

Wilfred Yeats
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24 posted 2000-11-05 03:07 PM


Snowpants
(secret: - my fav verse too) Thank you glad you liked it too

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