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What I am When I'm With You |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Exposing their alternate color Softly on my skin -I feel your presense Waking dormant feelings I can't ignore Spreading goosebumps raising hairs It will soon be prickles giving foretaste Of passion always to come I'm standing in a shallow pool Under the waterfall that is you Filling this empty vessel that is me Rinsing me clean Washing away my iniquities I feel I will burst Ripples spread across the pool Cones of leaves twirl across the meadow Trees shedding, bending in a fall ballet A hint of smoke, and cider fill the scented air You across the many states are here with me Oh yes - you are here I feel you in each tiny drop Cascading from my arms And in each wafted breeze That carries your scent I turn and embrace the water's fall Let its fluid rush conceive substantial you The liquid flow runs through my skies All the rainbows I see Are sparkles from your eyes The spilling spirit you my aqua vitae Ponce De Leon has found his fountain now Becomes my skin and enters in Akin we are despite so far I feel you deep within I imagine you can feel me as I feel you So we cavort in water stained with fall Tannin brown from leaves withal Sharing kisses wet and glorious Were we seen we'd be notorious And thus I smile first time today And whisper words you'd have me say As into rhyme our speech falls easy Laughter in our talk so breezy For all I am when I'm with you For all that's good that in me you imbue I'm giving thanks to you nightly And equal thanks to the almighty You fill my heart you fill my soul My very lungs you do control You're in the air I draw each breath There you'll stay until my death My mold sincere with Latin meaning In you I find all love I'm gleaning Then like two geese we gently nest Forever mated we take our rest < !signature--> Things which matter most must never be at the mercy of things which matter least. ~ Johann Wolfgang Von Goethe ~ [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 11-03-2000).] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
That is one beautiful poem Wilfred, you make it hard to chose a favorite. the visions are so vivid, painted with autumns colors, crisp, inviting. Excellent again, my friend. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Ahhh! ~so romantic and lovely~ Beautiful! I love the word "cavort". Loved this poem. Marcy |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Very Lovely thoughts you penned Wil.  ~Wynter Bliss "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Ah, Wil (I have an English cousin with your name, and he goes by that nick-name), how can I tell you how you touched my heart with this poem!?! Exquisite imagery! Beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--You touch my heart with the fall of color and the deep feelings that come from this lovely poem of imagery and heart. Well done! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wilfred that's a heavy longing you got going there and it's full of love...such yearning through a cascade of metaphors...word pictures swirling everwhere through the reader's mind's eye...It seems that a lot of your heart went into this and it was worth the effort...I really enjoyed the read.... ...ethome |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wilfred~ *Sigh* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sir Poet Bill* You cause a woman to *swoon* by the mere touch of your pen...what a beautiful enchanting weave...I'll simply give Marge a BIG ditto on that *sigh*!! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wilfred, a lovely write and a most enjoyable read  Coco |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Bill I love this...the images and flavors...water pouring over you...rainbows floating in the air...cider flavored kisses...wonderful |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
"Trees shedding, bending in fall ballet" My favorite line of this poem but not my favorite thought. There's lots of romance swirling around in those leaves Beautiful Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Perhaps I should offer each of you individual thanks - but I hope you'll forgive me for a blanket one this time. Let me say how grateful I am for for your warm replies and generous support of my efforts at writing poetry. I hope to always be at least as deserving as I am trying to be at this moment. So a big Mwahhhhhhhhhhhh kiss thrown to you all! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Could you, for a moment, quit being so GOOD? You might drive this woman to drink! Wow... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So we cavort in water stained with fall Tannin brown from leaves withal Sharing kisses wet and glorious Were we seen we'd be notorious And thus I smile first time today And whisper words you'd have me say As into rhyme our speech falls easy Laughter in our talk so breezy For all I am when I'm with you For all that's good that in me you imbue I'm giving thanks to you nightly And equal thanks to the almighty You fill my heart you fill my soul My very lungs you do control You're in the air I draw each breath There you'll stay until my death My mold sincere with Latin meaning In you I find all love I'm gleaning Then like two geese we gently nest Forever mated we take our rest ================ WOWOWOWOW... this is captivating.. superb use of imagery and metaphors Will they enhance the longing and anticipation with grace,,, this is excellent poet sir... those 2 geese....(lucky ducks me thinks) later-apple-cider-gator jm |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Excellent sir. . . they should always bring out the best in us. . . and we, in them. . . Superb. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea - Pour me a Glenfidych on the rocks - I'll join you ~S~ - thanks Janet Marie- reading replies from you is always always a most uplifting experience - If I'm any good at all it comes from the inspiration I find here and you're a principle source Sven - I'm so grateful I've found one who is - Thank you |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
under the waterfall that is you.... There are so many lines in this one I wish I had written! Beautiful and very touching, Bill. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
'tis done, but I cannot compete with Janet...so enjoy... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, then speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
'deer- High praise I call it from one whos poetry I admire so greatly Karilea- I toast a poet -(you) who should feel no competition - as you write some of the most beautiful poetry I read here |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Bill I am so glad to again see you smile, and wish only the best for you. Your writing is truly beautiful. *s* |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Gentle Spirit - that goes back to you double - we've both had some riugh times - but yu've survived veautifully - and I'm proud of your resiliance Thank you |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'You across the many states are here with me Oh yes - you are here I feel you in each tiny drop Cascading from my arms And in each wafted breeze That carries your scent' Oh, wow, Mr. Yeats! You got me with these wonderful lines! I truly loved this one!! sp  Do not go where the path may lead, but instead, go where there is no path and leave a trail. - Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Snowpants (secret: - my fav verse too) Thank you glad you liked it too |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Snowpants (secret: - my fav verse too) Thank you glad you liked it too |
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