Open Poetry #10 |
Missing You |
Manda_1982 Junior Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 24Washington State,USA |
If missing you would blacken stars, There’d be no midnight show. If missing you could make it rain, The seas would overflow. If missing you could make it hot, There’d be deserts all around. If missing you could silence noise, The earth would have no sound. And so I go on dreaming of you, When I’m holding and kissing you. For only God knows how much it hurts, When, my love, I’m missing you. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Full of love,, Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Manda.... You know, there are some loves in our lives that stay strong within our hearts. Missing that special love takes time to get over. I wish you time, filled with new happiness. Beautiful poem and very tender, my friend! Follow your dream! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
There's nothing like a sweet love poem... Parker |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yeah God knows...and I know too...for you see I am missing someone right now...James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What a great word pattern to get the point across and keep it in the mind of the reader .......good writing...such a down to earth appeal to the heart......take care ...ethome |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
wonderful piece penned with love. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Manda~ Welcome to Passions. Enjoyed these thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Welcome to Passions... very cool poem... love the metaphors to express the depth of the emotions.. creative and well written If missing you would blacken stars, There’d be no midnight show. If missing you could make it rain, The seas would overflow. ========= very cool-indeed.... I look forward to more of your work take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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