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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! 
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I don't know why you always try to place the blame on someone else pointing the finger like it's a loaded gun and you say it's all in fun well put on your fancy sneakers 'cause you're gonna be running for your life hurting too much and you know now that we have all had enough and i won't cry for you and they'll be laughing at you get up from that stench that you have created for yourself better put yourself in a higher gear lesson from the streets i have exposed all of your fears now you are drowning in someone elses tears and i am not being crude when i tell you that i don't really care they will see you after dark you will be running scared acounting for your sin again i know that you will never win you have been named the unforgiven < !signature--> Julie  [This message has been edited by JulieAnn (edited 10-29-2000).] |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
get up from that stench that you have created for yourself wow, this is really good. powerful and direct. you don't dodge the issues. Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! No doubting your feeings here! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Julie, this one is great. . . I love the line: "well, put on your fancy sneakers 'cause you're gonna be running for your life" Excellent. . . ----------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JulieAnn~ this is powerful and really packs a punch......I feel sorry for who ever is the unforgiven......excellent write -SEA |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Lots of deep and bitter emotions here, Julie, and very well portrayed. Woe be to the receipient.... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I think I have made these same feelings known to my other half just last evening, when he stopped by to torment me once again. How one can give up a decent life and choose to be in the gutter instead, I will never know, but that is where he shall forever be now to me. If this is real for you, I certainly understand. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Wow....You have packed a punch indeed..this is very intense and powerful...Very much enjoyed!!~ ~Cherie~ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Julie Ann, Wow I'm still reeling from the punch this piece packs. Be well Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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SouthernStar Junior Member
since 2000-10-30
Posts 23Georgia |
Yes this is certainly powerful. I'm in the process of trying and I do stress trying, to forgive the ex love of my life and I'm finding it very difficult to let go of the pain. My heart goes out to you. Tessa |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
love that last line...... "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Thanx much to all of you....not much time to giv each of you a special thanx but i will b around more often now so i will remembr each of your kind words....still this isn't about a lover it is about a sister...even WORSE!!! but well writing this really helped me put it into perspective for and helped me to let go of all of the anger and pain she caused... anyway thanx a bunch i appreciate all of the replies after not being around for so long... Julie  Julie :) |
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