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Is It Sin?
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Is It Sin? |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Is it sin? How we whisper? Like boys smoking Behind the school I see the smile In your words Feel your flesh Warm as we speak Like teens exploring New feelings You don't withdraw But blush A downward glance Turns up To meet my eyes My imagination Rampant Sees your smile Draws you close For the hesitant kiss I don't know Who Is more lost Who - Feels more found Who Feels more desire I hear your sigh Humming a tune For you We dance Kisses are sipped Desire drips I thirst For you I hunger so For you No other vintage Can satiate me |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Ummmmm, yes!!! This stirs the mind  Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
great lines here: "I don't know Who Is more lost Who - Feels more found" and love the sounds of these words strung together: "We dance Kisses are sipped Desire drips" a good display of longing is it sin? geez... you had to ask, didn't you? lol - major question  |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~This is truly wonderful writing. Wonderful to read. Mmm. Very nice. Thank you sir. *Peace. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
{~,^}...speechless...again... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
May I have a sip? |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Awesome! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--lovely piece of a longing heart you have written... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*great lines.....and so full with desire... excellent penned, as always Charisma |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wil, Kisses are sipped desire dripped. Sensual, beautiful and totally awesome Keth Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Peppermiint- the 'mind'? - I was aiming elsewhere ~G~ Thanks Doreen - "sin" - was just to get you to read LOL - Thanks Spitfire- and peace and thanks to you - Karilea- Speechless? - I find that hard to believe ~G~ Thanks Paula - Only if you're not in AA - Thanks Gemini- Martie- Charisma Thank You Kethry- I never thought of my writing as awesome - thank you |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
A sin???? Well is it a sin to give of yourself to one that is able to receive as well as give back totally? I think not. The sin would be in turning your back on a gift bestowed upon you in my book. YES, I will agree with AWESOME and you might as well get used to it being called such and thinking of it that way because it truely is. {Nice to see you wearing that crown with such a high shine on it} |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Mark = we've got to come up with something new - aside from not entertaining us - we're not entertaining anyone else - I will leave it at thanks for now till I think of something ~G~ Alle'cram- someday- when you're in the mood - you can explain your 'handle' - I find it intriguing - Thank you |
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