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Tomorrow's Train |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
Tomorrow’s Train sleep eluded her as dreams ran astray; tomorrow he’d leave though she wished he’d stay. as night crept silent, she quietly rose, floated towards window wearing forlorn pose. she watched as full moon smiled sadly at her aware haunted thoughts possessed with no cure. when she heard him shift, she turned ‘round to gaze upon his still form through bereft tear’s haze. draped in moonlight’s shawl, she reached out to touch, stroke hair from the face she loved too damn much. withdrew with choked cry, afraid to give in; his hand caught her wrist, he pulled her to him. his arms circled her, he kissed away tears, murmured assurance, released those old fears. soothed by his strength, she allowed eyes to meet, saw love shining there beside passion’s heat. with delighted cry, she kissed him madly, full heart and soul, she surrendered gladly. and though he did leave on tomorrow’s train, she finally believed they’d make love again. "A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside." |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'draped in moonlight’s shawl, she reached out to touch, stroke hair from the face she loved too damn much.' Wow! Got me with those lines! This is absolutely beautiful! Great first post! Welcome to Passions. Looking forward to reading more of your work! sp  Of all sad words of tongue or pen, the saddest are these: 'it might have been.' -John Greenleaf Whittier |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Wow! Very good work. My favorite was the grabbing of the wrist! I melted from there on!  Beautiful! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Sometimes I read and don't post because you can only say something is beautiful so many ways. This touched me as I can understand the pain of wondering, and the release of finding out the answers. You have made a grand entrance, welcome. Dee |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I was so much looking forward to your first post...I must admit I already visited your web page and your work is awesome! A perfect entrance to Passions and I do hope that you will enjoy your stay. Thank you for joining us...you and your talent are a most welcome addition~ |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
LoriJaye, What an entrance into Passions, Welcome to this poets lair. Look forward to reading more. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You've got quite a knack for description! Welcome to passions! Enjoyed this very much! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoriJaye~ Welcome to the posting side of Passions. You will enjoy the friendship circle we share. I visited your web site and found it lovley. This post is very charismatic ... pulling the reader along. Lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
 Welcome to Passions LJ What a wonderful and lyrical poem you've chosen for your entrance! The flow is lovely, and the sentiments paint such beautiful and vivid visuals ... I very much enjoyed this piece, and look forward to more! Best wishes, /Kit *PS ... very nice website! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Welcome aboard the Passions train, Lori... This is indeed a wonderful place - You'll love it here - I'm looking forward to reading more of your work... Check your email for a special greeting..  |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Simply beautiful, such imagery! Bonnie |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
beautiful..just beautiful welcome to passions |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
welcome to passions..... and you have made a great entrance. I will look out for more. Charisma |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
your posting here is long overdue -~G~ - but your entrance - is no less spectacular than I would have expected WELCOME |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
Oh, MY! I don't know where to begin...I am thoroughly overwhelmed by the response and warm welcome I've received here...y'all have left me speechless! Now what am I to do? *laughing* Thank you! Each one individually and all as a truly wonderful passel of passionate poets... snowpants and Temptress and Dee and Butterflies don't cry and Daniel J D and Serenity and Marge and Kit and Nan and Bonnie and Lorelei and Charisma and Wil... Thank you for reading and responding. I look forward to enjoying the talent I've found here and sharing my words with y'all. (((((hugs))))) LJ =*) |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A most wonderful first post. Welcome to the passions family, with poems like this I look forward to reading more. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Welcome LoriJaye!!! This is an excellent first poem. . . got any extra tickets for that train???? Wonderful. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
LoriJaye, Beautiful and heart felt writing for your first post. I am betting you fit right in here!! Welcome to Passions!!! Looking forward to reading more of your work. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
Prometheus, Sven, and Lone Wolf - thank you!! Thank you so much! Such a wonderful welcome I've received...I will definitely be posting more. =) And Sven, as for those tickets...why don't I just dump out the contents of this sack of a purse and see what I've got for ya, 'kay? hehe *giggling* LJ |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Wonderful poem.....great feelings showing.....welcome to passions.... |
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ma miller Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 806 |
awesome ... a great read ... welcome My calling before me, let quill be my offering; For to be called poet, no greater gift to receive. M.A. |
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LoriJaye Junior Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 34Massachusetts USA |
Alan and M.A. - Thank you both so much! =) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
WOW welcome to our world...and such a great entrance you have made |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to Passions, this is very good. I'm impressed and look forward to reading more. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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