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Acies
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0 posted 2000-10-23 09:10 PM


First of all, I think these don't belong in this forum for all the poems I've read in here simply amazes me.  I just wanna share them in return for allowing me the chance to read yours.  So, here's some of em:

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Footprints in the sand...
Why do I see four instead of two?
Alone, left with the irony of life
Faith wounded and scarred
What am I to do?
Troubles and Tribulations?
Life's meaning is lost in dreams
Begging for answers and miracles
Wanting her back
A fool, I am, it seems

Shown the way back
This is not an option to take
Please listen to my prayers
I'll love her forever
Help me before it's too late

Footprints in the sand...
Still, I see four
Exhausted, lost, and confused
Keep searching no matter what
Wanna be with her forever more
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Why am I given this life if I only have to go thru all these pain?
Seeing everything I hope for and dream of slowly fade away
Overflowing distress? Total confusion? Faith to denounce?
Why must Life make me hurt, bleed, and suffer everyday?
A disease slowly eating thru everything that I have lived for
To supposedly be kept and can never be returned till taken?
So unfair and merciless that just like that, insanity fills my mind
Why must I be grateful for a chance to be in a world uncertain?

I bleed for all who suffers, I don't want anyone to feel the same
This is unjust. Peace of mind is gone and no where to be found
Where is the help I have been taught to ask and pray for?
What is life's real meaning, if in shackles I am forever bound?

I am tired of crying, hurting, and just plain tired of everything
I have no where to hide, no one to turn to for I am full of doubt
When do I heal? Time's worth is no essence to me anymore
Just want to know the truth and finally realize what I'm living for
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I love you...

I love you with all my heart, my mind, my soul
I'll love you even beyond Death's knock at my door
Like a stream flowing from the rains of an April day
A flower's blooming scene during the month of May

I love you without doubt and questions asked
I'll love you even after eternity's time has already passed
Like horizon's gold on morning's daily gift of light
Or a full moon's pride on a cloudless and starry night

I love you beyond love's own unexplored definition
I'll love you even thru all of love's own contradictions
Like an eagle's majesty as it spreads it's wings in flight
Or that of a parent's touch on their newly born child

Above all...
I love you for I've realized one thing to be true
I'll always love you for I realized that "Love is You"

I love you...
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Footprints in the sand...?




I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2000-10-23 09:39 PM


Hey you...this is nice stuff.

"Faith wounded and scarred
   What am I to do?..."

"I love you beyond love's own unexplored definition..."

Whaddya mean, you don't belong here?

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-10-23 10:46 PM


Welcome to Open Acire!    Of course you belong! You've penned such lovely description and powerful emotions throughout these lines ... wonderful sentiments!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

LoriJaye
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3 posted 2000-10-23 10:54 PM


Hmmmm...why would you feel your words don't belong here? Your words spoke to me...were true, were YOU...as any poet's express their own unique vision.

I enjoyed these poems of yours very much and am glad I had the opportunity to read them...I hope to see more...please?

=)  LJ


"A smile is when your inner beauty comes outside."

Dee
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4 posted 2000-10-23 10:58 PM


acire, these are beautiful poems. I have sent them to myself so I can read them again at my leisure, off line.
I think we have all had doubts about our poems at some time or other.
I believe all it takes to belong here is an ability to write and a love of poetry and people. I think you have filled that criteria.
It is good to always want to improve, but don't let that get confused with thinking you can't write. You can!
I'm DEFINITELY NOT saying you need to but if YOU think you need improvment try the workshops. I found them today and I'll be back (because I DO need help, but I'm not brave enough to go to CA).
Dee




[This message has been edited by Dee (edited 10-23-2000).]

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2000-10-23 11:04 PM


Acire~

If we threw a pity party
for poet's without a clue
We'd have to leave you out
for there is talent in you !

Now quit your belly-aching
and hunker down and write ...
We appreciate your stuff
so share with us each night.

Read the works of others
and leave a sweet reply
others will get to know you
on that you can rely

From each poet that I've read
I've learned a thing or two ...
We crank it out and share it
for we're poets true-blue !

See .... you already inspired me !
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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JamesMichael
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6 posted 2000-10-24 07:27 AM


"I Love you for I've realized one thing to be true
I'll always love you for I realized Love is you."
Very nice writing...I enjoy experiencing love within relationships with others...James

Sunshine
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7 posted 2000-10-24 09:11 AM


ummm, dittoing Marge...

and a Hearty Welcome to Open!


Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



Charisma
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8 posted 2000-10-24 10:23 AM


Footprints in the sand.....
I recognize this line, have a poem on my wall, with this as title.....

and than I read further, captured with your love, your feelings...that you penned from your heart.
you are more than welcome, and hey I am not a good writer too....wish I was....but well I have a handicap, as english isn't my native tongue......

keep on writing.....and keep on with sharing it with us.

Charisma



Kethry
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9 posted 2000-10-25 07:25 AM


acire
of course you belong
where else could you be
with your shining examples
of good poetry.
Be well
Kethry


Growth demands a temporary surrender of security.
Gail Sheehy

Elizabeth Santos
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Posts 9269
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10 posted 2000-10-25 07:44 AM


A volume a powerful sentiments, just what we thrive on at passions
Welcome to the perfect place to vent your love and sorrow and joy
Liz

Alan
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right next door
11 posted 2000-10-25 07:48 AM


acire......I agree with the others...you do belong here....wonderful work...I'll be looking for more
Alan

jonmcm
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12 posted 2000-10-25 08:46 AM


acire, thank you for posting your poems, I enjoyed them! So post More............Jon


Ron K. Fox
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13 posted 2000-10-25 11:52 AM


hey acire, I found a home here yesterday, now you can join the family. You're welcomed with open arms (and open poetry of course). Ron
Acies
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14 posted 2000-10-25 07:52 PM


To all that have made me feel so welcome in this forum, I would like to thank you so much.  I know you're just being nice  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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