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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
The darkness calls Screaming out her name Pulling her in While she grabs hopelessly For the light Tears flood her eyes As her footing slips From the rock That once was Her heart Determined not to fall She clings to rememberence Of what once was The foundation still solid While the walls vibrate with change With each piece of plaster that falls There is pain Yet with firm foundation The pain is bareable She will not let her rock fall Her foundation crack For nothing in her life Has been so strong So constaint With a deep breath She calms her tears Sets her footing And weathers the storm That is life; that is love He can not abandon her For he knows what she is Even in his disbelieving The truth is in his heart His foundation, in her eyes When the storm is finished And the debries are cleared Beauty most enchanting Is rebuilt On unshakable ground When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Marylin~I liked this. How about On Unshakeable Ground for a title? Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... [email protected] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marilyn~ Nicely done, indeed. I like the hope shown in the ending ! How about Weathering The Storm ? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderfully descriptive Marilyn! This flows so beautifully, and brings such vivid imagery to mind. I really enjoyed the sense of urgency built into the beginning, a wonderful piece!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Marilyn! I like Elizabeth's and Marge's suggestions for a title. Denise |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Marilyn, Like your writing, and glad I stopped by. How about 'From The Darkness' for a title? Bill |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thankyou all for your responses and for your ideas. I still am unsure of what to title this piece but I am sure it will come to me eventually. I loved all of your suggestions and will concider each of them. |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Marilyn, I enjoyed the way this piece works through the dark clouds...concluding with hope, and resolve. Robert Joseph |
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