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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Your Gift In the air you float The scent of you teasing Your blithe spirit Turns to face me Diaphanous gown falls open Your gift to me My mind turns you real Tangible to my touch My eyes bathe you Below your shoulders I see the results raise the fabric The offering More treasured Than gold At my touch The gown falls As my eyes wash The tremble starts Skin shimmers So filled am I With your brimming eyes The gift in your smile Open-mouthed My moist breath Warms your skin Feather kisses Move to tongue touches Up your neck My senses on overload As we embrace Kiss Succumb to our passion ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Please never let me wake from this dream where you send me...breathe on me...YES YES YES |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is, without a doubt, an exquisitely sensual and provocative turn of the pen... well done, Mr. Yeats... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Uh huh.......Beautiful to say the least. Bonnie |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Paula - Karilea - Bonnie- Your enthusiasm - warms my heart - almost as does my lady - and encourages me to write more - thank you so much ~S~ ~You have to have a dream so you can get up in the morning. ~ Billy Wilder |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--Beautiful, sensual rendering of your passion's feeling. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautifully done!  Geesh...Yanno..I actually have a favorite word in the whole poem too...Blithe...I like that word. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Bill, your written love life beat the stuffings out of my real one! Wanna trade?  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie- I have beautiful sensual inspiration Thank You Temptress- "Blithe" eh - once in a while my vocab works for me thanks ~S~ 'deer' - no trade ~S~ sorry - but love how you think~S~ thanks |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My mind turns you real Tangible to my touch My eyes bathe you Below your shoulders I see the results raise the fabric The offering More treasured Than gold At my touch The gown falls As my eyes wash The tremble starts Skin shimmers ================ quote: "I see the results raise the fabric" OH MAN ... what a way cool phrase ...very unique and original ... tasty treat of sensual tease you have penned here Wil... she does indeed..inspire great things in you. awesome writing later-satiated-gator jm |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
JM- TY - You must have sensed how much this line alone taxed me more than any other. Clearly there were much more direct ways to say it - but none i could think of would keep me from being transfered directly to adult later Thanks again gater |
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