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Melancholia |
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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
vacant, curled-up, shrouded sobbing wearily locked in your room shades pulled drinking in bed all night long devoured by your strange dreams your door flung wildly open screaming fading out sleeping days on end terrified of the moon her careless ways and could not change you suffocated me crying draining waiting for the end waiting for you to - please god something other than this common dim house dishes piled in sink checkered tablecloth smell of sadness on everything on your shoes in my hair I sleep rocking huddled on the couch alone & still see you misery coming through the ceiling so delicate it makes me love you this precious mess know you're still somewhere on this sinking ship clung to the memory of it wasn't always this - your endless silence love one day changing causeless lost your mind forced into an absract version of yourself retired slowly into your eyes abandoned by ghosts you're not over you sung your agony in open choirs weeping hysterical struggling between who you are, who you have been |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Azure~ this is amazing, I wish I could write like this.....  -SEA |
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azure Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 52 |
SEA - Wow, thank you. That's the best kind of compliment a writer can get. I appreciate it. Azure "I put it down on paper and then the ghost does not ache so much" - Sandra Cisneros |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I wish I didn't know about this one---a poignant powerful read---still trying to get my breath back---this is stunning. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, this is incredible, love your writing, this reeks sadness, but so beautifully so powerfully...great work |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Well, I'll tell you one thing I have learned from reading these couple from you so far... You structure your work in such a fashion that the reader really has to concentrate to read it all the way through and be able to understand it, which makes it all seem so much real because it requires your full attention. I really like this about your work, contrary to what you thought  very niceStrive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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