»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #10
»
The finger dance of hallowed May
| Open Poetry #10 |
|
The finger dance of hallowed May |
|
|
Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods 
|
I am tentatively posting this here, although if the subject matter is a little too bawdy I would be happy to delete the contents (or let a moderator do the same if they get the chance first.) Personally, to me, this seems to be within good taste, but I want to keep other's views in mind. I don’t have access to the Adult Forums yet, and if this would be better suited there, I would be happy to remove this version and wait until I’m allowed entrance to the other forum. Thanks for your patience. Enjoy. The finger dance of hallowed May rested on the lip of night, where serpents’ heads embossed on trees, were halloed by stars’ pale giddy light Under summer’s heavy breathing, and a bald eyed moon’s imposing glare, the grass slept weeping, zephyr creeping between thighs, secretions, and backbones bare. my dreams remember voices crooning, the rich velour of midnight swooning tasting, fondling, and subduing, my heart lightly rapping on the sky. your fingers hinted at strokes and lines: skin sliding dry; encircling, luring: the muted sound of cupped sand pouring drums in my auditory hollow, sugared and refined. and so, my aura tongue a’tasting, my words in murmurs all a’wasting, you set my spirit heavy-drooling with vulva tremble beneath honey shoulders In the drowsy sweepsway of moan and tender, and the frenzy caper of vertebrae bender, with skins suckling life from one another we shook the earth to break it’s boulder’s Now resting, tangled with sweet, warm center Your fingers lilting me to sleepsurrender with cosmos breathing behind my eyes, I bask in truth and afterglow… slippery night rivers keep their insistent flow. |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Megs - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beth,  Kethry Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
||
|
Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This poem is like when you learn to ride a bike, and weaving back and forth over the designated line. But everyone's so happy you stayed up, it doesn't matter which side of the line your on.In other words, this is borderline - could be adult or forum 10, unless a moderator disagrees, I'm comfortable - well maybe just a little hot right now You do have a way with words and thoughts I think this is terrific! It only reinforces your talents Liz |
||
|
Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Kethry, ~giggles~... thanks  . Glad you enjoyed it.Liz, Thank you so much for your input... your opinion matches mine (which is why I posted this _here_). A really nice metaphor as well... although I'm not sure which way to take this line: "But everyone's so happy you stayed up, it doesn't matter which side of the line your on" hee hee... A note to the rest: I recieved an e-mail from a moderator who said that this post will stay unless it draws negative comments (which I welcome if they are imperative). So, if someone believes this would be more suitably left unsaid, please, speak up! ~ Beth [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (edited 10-16-2000).] |
||
Acies
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Hold on...I have to wipe the sea of drool I dripped on the floor OMG!!! I have nothing to say. Amazing!!! What do you do? Do you teach poetry? My brain's numbed useless keep sharing I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
||
|
Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Beth, your phrasing was both sensual and eloquent. Always a pleasure to read your work. Thank you for sharing it with us. Robert Joseph |
||
|
Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Acire, ~hands you a towel~ OMG!!! Thank you! And actually, I'm an Arachnology major (Ewww! Beth plays with spiders???) you can imagine my social life  Robert Joseph, Thank you for your delightful reply. ...Eloquent, how I love that word! Thank you both for reading and taking the time to add your two kind cents .~ Beth I hate quotations. Tell me what you know. |
||
|
Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
as one who has pushed the bounds fairly often - and appreciates the sensual and sensuous as much as, if not more than most - let me simply say I love it! incredible metaphors ! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
