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A Little Rain Must Fall
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A Little Rain Must Fall |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“A LITTLE RAIN MUST FALL” The rains they came down, at such a torrid pace, it sounded like thunder, came from every place… But was it thunder, and rain from the sky, or was it your endless tears, running on by? Perhaps they’re tears of happiness, to make you sing again, or ones of sadness, and of tormenting pain… They ran down your face, flowing past your chin, looked like the falling rain, as it caressed your skin… And the thunder that I heard, from all around, didn’t come from the sky, but were your inner most sounds… They were ones of loneness, and agonizing trials, trying to cleanse a soul, after traveling many lonely miles… Your tears and the rain I can see, the thunder I hear, all of it touches my heart, and I can hardly bear… I tried to dry them, from inside and out, but I couldn’t do it, for they won in a rout… So many tears of anguish, and ones of forlorn, will the rain ever stop, for one that I adorn? Or will it continue to flow, all over the place, never wanting to stop, always coming down your face… The rain fell endlessly, and finally overflowed, from your hurtful eyes, which were so sorrowed… It continued and came, was such a display, even when it wanted to become, a bright sunny day… My essence was aware, of all your fears, and I tried my best, to make them disappear… But it seemed not to matter, for whatever I did, the falling rain became, all of your tears… Bill Charles |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
A lovely poem Bill..and i loved the form too..flows very nicely  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What powerful comparisons you've drawn Bill ... excellent descriptive verse! Try though we might to ease another's pain, sometimes the wounds run too deep ... though always, we and they, are the better for the heartfelt effort. Beautifully written! Best wishes, /Kit |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
NICELY WRITTEN!!!!!! Liked it!!!!!!!! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good afternoon Victoria, Thank you for coming by, and for your gracious comments about this writing. Good afternoon Kit, Thanks for your considerate comments. I'm glad that you enjoyed this writing, and that you had a chance to stop by. Thanks again. Good afternoon vandana, Thank you for the kind comments. And thanks for coming by. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Bill this is an excellant poem, I really like it, and even in the happiest times there are some tears. Although they may not be for what others think they are for. This is excellantly written, and has a lovely flow, just like the rain. Take care  Marsha |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Bill~ this was beautiful!! first of your work that i have read. i shall be reading many more. you have evoked some stunning images and emotions in this piece. excellent! take care. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Marsha, Thanks for coming by to read something I have written. And thanks so much for your kind comments, I do appreciate it. Evening Aimster, I appreciate your considerate comments about this writing. I'm glad that you stopped by for a read, and thanks for saying you will be back. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
...and those tears... which fall into every life... somehow manage to define happiness, don't they?... Nice job, Bill - This is a very nice piece...  |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
We weather life's emotional storms. Afterall, without them we can not appreciate the sunny skies and warm sun in their aftermath Excellent read, Mr. Charles. ...chanson~ Music, tonal clear & pure, Caresses the harshest of curves. -me, Song of Gesture |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Hi Bill, You have penned a great poem... The ending just tugged at the soul... Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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Miss Behavin' Member
since 1999-06-16
Posts 84 |
So... If there weren't a little rain falling... Then all the rivers would run dry... and we'd have no rainbows - and what would you write about next?.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Nan, Thanks for stopping and for the gracious comments. Always a pleasure to see your words of kindness. Evening chansondegeste, Thank you for the understanding of what this writing was about. I glad that you were able to stop by. Evening CocoBaci, Nice to see you again, and thanks for the considerate comments. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Miss Behavin', I'm so glad that you came by tonight. Let's see, if there weren't a little rain falling, and all the rivers were dry then perhaps, I could write about the ocean. No, that wouldn't do, because if everything dryed up, then the oceans would be dry. But there would be always one thing around. I think that I would write about a woman with Brown Eyes. How about that, my dear Miss Behavin'? |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Bill "My essence was aware, of all your fears, and I tried my best, to make them disappear… But it seemed not to matter, for whatever I did, the falling rain became, all of your tears…" These are beautiful words with so much meaning. I need a kleenex (sniff, sniff) Ariana |
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Ain' Miss Behavin' Junior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 25 |
..Well.. then.. Whatever would we do with all the lighthouses??.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Ariana, I appreciate you coming by to read this poem that I have written. The verse that you liked, I also do. Very much meaning is in it. Just a sec, I have a whole box of Kleenex right over there, on the table. Well hello, Ain' Miss Behavin'. You must be Miss Behavin's alter ego. Now about those lighthouses. I would turn all of them into quaint places to have din-din. Candlelight, a chilled bottle of wine, soft music, and how about a little romance? Or perhaps I'll just write a poem about one particular lighthouse! Don't misbehave too much now, ya hear? |
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Justin Kace Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 82Oz |
Justin Kace the seas run dry Then conjure up a storm Refill the ocean-tides to high The lighthouse then shall warn Of candle light to passers-by Romantic du-tunes till morn... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Bill - this shows your heart - AND your talent - JMHO - but the best of yours I've read and a real 'keeper'. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Justin Kace, I do like the verse that you left. It continues......... The seas run high, gone astray Justin Kace, storm is rising, sky darkens at a quicker pace… Candles of the lighthouse, flicker a warning, to sailors of the night, and ships hulls baring… thanks for coming by, Bill |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Wilfred, Many thanks for coming by, and nice to see you. Your comments touch me, and to me is an honor, for the kind words that you wrote to me, coming from another poet. Thanks again. Bill |
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Laverne Pacquire Member
since 2009-11-15
Posts 96 |
introspective write... |
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sasanka7 Junior Member
since 2010-11-17
Posts 30 |
Hi Bill, your poem touched my heart. So wonderful feelings it is! Thanks for sharing. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
nice to know some one cares My spirit will rise |
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