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A Letter To My Heart
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A Letter To My Heart |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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A Letter To My Heart Take care my heart, hold fast your ground, Let not these sorrows, weigh you down. Just you and I, my trembling heart, In quiet darkness, we depart, On journey through this endless maze, We've built upon our tortured days. Beyond the guise of happiness, Intrude the woes of emptiness; Alone amongst these thoughts are we, In silent void of misery. I urge you, beat your rhythm fair, To overcome this deep despair; Do not grow silent lest we fall, And find ourselves succumbed to all. 'Tis in these times, we persevere, While beg the pain to disappear; Though long before the night is through, I fear this ache shall smother you. Take hold my heart, and carry on, 'Tis only hours before the dawn. /Kit McCallum |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
'Tis in these times, we persevere, While beg the pain to disappear; Though long before the night is through, I fear this ache shall smother you. Take hold my heart, and carry on, 'Tis only hours before the dawn. =================== Kit this is lovely and wonderfully written the cadence and rhyme are EXCELLENT and your vocabulary choices are perfect ... "Do not grow silent lest we fall, And find ourselves succumbed to all." what a cool line my dear.. this is such a strong piece of work... right down to the title and the idea of writing to your heart...very creative.... superb!!! later-pen-pal-gator  jm |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Take care my heart, hold fast your ground, Let not these sorrows, weigh you down. Just you and I, my trembling heart, In quiet darkness, we depart, On journey through this endless maze, We've built upon our tortured days. ====================================== Do not grow silent lest we fall, And find ourselves succumbed to all. ====================================== Kit my friend, this was so superbly written and so filled with tortured emotion. You have penned an amazing piece of work in this and I can only hope for you that this is not because of things going on now. If so then you have taken the first step to healing and "A Letter To My Heart"...what a unique letter indeed. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kit, I sit in silence reading your rhyme and I must say I find this one to be one of your bests, well to be honest it's kinda hard to pick just one of your poems... Anyhow, it's a superb write and thankU for a great read 2nite  Coco |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Well done Kit Beautifully penned piece to your heart, I hope it helped Felt the lonliness and pain in this HUGS Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dear Kit; Exquisitely written poem! I have been in this place of which you speak, and God heals! Love, Ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
Kit, That's a good idea. I find myself troubled too, at times. I got up around 0300 this morning. I'll have to write to myself and see if it helps. Thanks, Melton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kit this is an amazing write. Absolutely perfect, I love it all but if I had to pick a couple of lines they would be Take hold my heart and carry on 'Tis only hours before the dawn Utterly brilliant writting, and remember if you need a shoulder to lean on give me a yell. I might not be much use but I'd try and I can listen like a professional ear. Take care Marsha a couple of smiles in case you need them. [This message has been edited by Marsha (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Kit, You did it again! Another exquisite piece. I think I need to have a talk with my heart! Take care Liz |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Kit I LOVED this! excellent rhyme and beautiful selection of word choice... "Beyond the guise of happiness, Intrude the woes of emptiness; Alone amongst these thoughts are we, In silent void of misery. I urge you, beat your rhythm fair, To overcome this deep despair; Do not grow silent lest we fall, And find ourselves succumbed to all" Absoultely stunning lines! I think this is my favorite one of yours...though that's a hard choice LOL. Take care ~Amy~ "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
love it Kit..nicely written.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, as always, Kit! Very well expressed! Denise |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
All I can offer is a huge hug, I hope that dawn has brought some peace with it. Excellently written, take care my friend. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
in the light of dawn a heart heals and begins to face that new day. . . simply beautiful Kit. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Kit, I hope your heart feels better soon. Let me know if you find the cure, would you? Sandra |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
"I urge you, beat your rhythm fair, To overcome this deep despair; Do not grow silent lest we fall, And find ourselves succumbed to all." This really got to me, I will never forget these lines, thank you for the entire poem, it's very special to me. I loved it. < !signature--> Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 10-15-2000).] |
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Jhonbus Junior Member
since 2000-10-12
Posts 25Sheffield UK |
Beyond the guise of happiness, Intrude the woes of emptiness; ========== bleh... (speechless) I feel the same.. here is a stanza from one of my own... ====== Someone held the door open for me today i smiled and said thanks. "no problem" feel i have to be cheerful on the face of it at least ====== I feel like I have two levels of moods - what others see, and how I actually feel, like some kind of "underlying" mood.. http://www.geocities.com/i_love_you_so_much_c/ |
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Josh New Member
since 2000-10-15
Posts 3 |
your heart will heal,and someday you'll find your soulmate...good poem... |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Beautiful, sad, well written and somebody else writing my mind Excellent job.Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Janet Marie: Do you know that you ALWAYS make me smile JM! Thank you for being you!  ~Mark: Sometimes Mark, I'm afraid I do indeed reach the lows, though somehow manage to pull myself up ... writing helps, and wonderful responses like yours also, thank you! ~Coco: Thanks so much Coco ... I am very flattered and appreciative of these beautiful words! ~Tracie: Thanks Tracie ... it does help. If I didn't have a pen and paper, I'm sure I'd be broke from couch therapy by now! ~Ellie: Thanks so much Ellie. I do keep that in mind always, and hugs back to you for reminding me. Thank you! ~Melton: Thank you for reading Melton ... I've been doing this for 30 some odd years, and it truly does help! Many thanks for your comments. ~Marsha: I so love your replies Marsha! Thanks you very much for the smiles, and I do really appreciate them, and your lovely thoughts! ~Liz: Seems we've both been talking with our hearts Liz. I'm so glad you enjoyed, and thank you for these wonderful sentiments! ~Amy: You are so kind Amy, thank you so much for such a beautiful comment, your words means a great deal to me! ~Victoria: Thank you so much Victoria, I'm glad you enjoyed! ~Denise: Thanks Denise ... I very much appreciate your encouragement and enjoyment! ~Brian: I'll take that huge hug Brian, and give you one right back ... thank you so much. Dawn is a relief some nights! ~Sven: Thank you for these beautifully composed thoughts Sven ... very much appreciated! ~Sandra: If I find the cure Sandra ... I'll be sure to drop you a note! Thanks for reading and leaving your thoughts! ~Kathleen: I'm glad you enjoyed Kathleen, and these were my more favourable lines too, thank you! ~Jhonbus: You've pegged this perfectly Jhonbus. Thank you for reading so much into these words, much appreciation! ~Josh: Thank you for these lovely thoughts Josh ... I am grateful you enjoyed! ~Thunderkyss: After reading your poem this morning Thunderkyss, I do understand why you've said this ... seems our wavelengths are following the same paths. Thank you for this lovely response! Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Kit, This is one marvelous and most exquisite poem.... way too fantastic... regards, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ WOW ! Time to check my mail - maybe I've written one for me ! I do understand the need to pen our thoughts, doubts, disappointments, frustrations and then to hope there's enough ink left over for JOY ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
"Take hold my heart, and carry on, 'Tis only hours before the dawn." The entire write is stunning Kit, but this stanza is perfection my friend. Sheer poetic genius. This is bound for my library. [This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 10-21-2000).] |
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The Lonely Stranger Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 361Upstate, NY, USA |
Just adding the thread to library.... BRAVO |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is words from the heart! this was very touching Kit beautiful words, sometimes the heart does seem smothered and carrying to much emotions, applause to you this is excellent |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Kit, Writing from the heart is so beautiful and honest . . . I love it. I would be broke also without pen and paper. Writing is the best therapy in the world. Hope you are feeling better and that there are more highs than lows in your future my friend. Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kit, *HuGS* There are no words. Be well Keth. Growth demands a temporary surrender of security. Gail Sheehy |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kit- this is wonderful! beautifully written. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Kit...hugs to you dear one...and I am there in the dark with you...I hope you know that |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
'Tis in these times, we persevere, While beg the pain to disappear; Though long before the night is through, I fear this ache shall smother you. ------------- ------------- *is speechless* .....Well said. Much love all, Krissie ~*Those words... Oh, how I long to hear ...those words Tell me...*~ |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Oh my Kit ~ How beautifully you have written what I have felt so often...Your words filled with such heartfelt emotion, your poem, a true piece of art. Bonnie |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I urge you, beat your rhythm fair, To overcome this deep despair; Do not grow silent lest we fall, And find ourselves succumbed to all very beautifully written, touched my heart...making me want to persevere. ~Wynter |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kit, my friend, the days are UP now, correct? Well done write, fine read...knowing that the night will soon be over, and daylight will again come... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Sudhir: You're so sweet Sudhir, thanks for these kind words! ~Marge: So true Marge ... when the down days hit, I always hope for an upbeat poem to follow before long (which it did thankfully) ... thank you! ~TheLonelyStranger: Wow ... thank you for these wonderful words, I am very appreciative! ~Rosebud: Thank you so much for reading and understanding Rosebud ... I'm very grateful! ~LoneWolf: Thanks LoneWolf ... yes, I managed to get beyond that night, though they always sneak back, thank you for these words. ~Kethrey: Thank you for the hugs Kethrey, I'm glad you stopped in for a read, hugs back to you! ~Vicky: Thanks so much Vicky for these encouraging words, much appreciated! ~Paula: Oh Paula, thank you. I am sorry if you find yourself in the dark also some nights ... it's an awful feeling, hugs to you too! ~AniKay: Thanks so much Krissie ... your speechless comment gave me a smile, and is very appreciated! ~Bonnie: What a beautiful response Bonnie ... I'll send hugs your way for knowing that you've been there too, thank you! ~Nakdthoughts: I'm so glad it gave you the feeling to persevere ... that's truly what I hoped to portray, thanks! ~Sunshine: (Smiling) Thanks Karilea, and yes, the days are "up" again ... this poem has been recycling itself in a most bizarre pattern, but I'm never too far off the down days unfortunately, sometimes it doesn't take much. Thank you for the sweet response! Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How in the WORLD did I miss this one???? Kit, you are an wonderful talent |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Balladeer: LOL ... you find me eventually, as I do you Michael (I'd almost missed one of yours this morning too!). Thank goodness to "poetic recycling" eh? I'm so glad you enjoyed, and thank you for these sweet words, I always enjoy seeing your name appear with your thoughts. Much appreciation, /Kit |
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