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PeterPeter
Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 30
British, London

0 posted 2000-09-23 10:07 AM


The Perfect World?

So perfect without people
Because we often fail to see
All beauty that surrounds us
God made it with care
And loving fuss

Just take another look
This time open your eyes
Move for a minute outside
your own  world and sense
The sights
The smells
The cries

Stop and think how it
all could really be
Enjoy that thought a while
Don’t lose Gods gift
to be kind and peaceful
Or show a caring smile

Try hard next time to see
The perfect world God made
Take in every detail.
How complex
Yet so simple

Every foundation of nature
Perfectly laid


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WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
1 posted 2000-09-23 10:15 AM


I totally agree! In the rush of life we often miss the beauty that surrounds us.

I hope you'll visit us in the Spiritual forum sometime!

<*\\\><

I know not what the future holds,
but I know Who holds the future.

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
2 posted 2000-09-23 10:29 AM


So PERFECTLY written by you.  Now that is the way to live and to grow.  Excellent piece from you. DID I mention perfect too?
Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
3 posted 2000-09-23 10:40 AM


PeterPeter - welcome, welcome to Passions...you would be treasured in Spiritual Journeys so, like Whtdove, I encourage your visits there, as well as all other arenas of Passions...seems like you'll have lots to share with us all...

well done...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ


Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
4 posted 2000-09-24 06:42 AM


PeterPeter, welcome to passions,
what an uplifting, nifty, ditty you created. Well done. However it's a bit worrying that you write the world would be perfect without people.
Be well
Kethry


"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

PeterPeter
Junior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 30
British, London
5 posted 2000-09-24 07:05 AM


Dear Kethry,

Thanks for picking up on that point, that is the point of the poem, after all, the world is perfect, it's only the people that spoil it sometimes.

Thanks again
Peter

[This message has been edited by PeterPeter (edited 09-24-2000).]

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