Open Poetry #10 |
yeah, in ya dreams... |
Jhonbus Junior Member
since 2000-10-12
Posts 25Sheffield UK |
I was listening to the Eels song "selective memory" (anyone here listen to them?) and it inspired/reminded me to write this. That song really made sense to me... It feels warm and dark up here in my head so i know that i'm lying asleep in my bed When sleeping i'm happy cause here things occur that don't normally happen like being with her I wake in my dream and then look around a soft orange glow a faint crackling sound I see there's a fire the coals glowing dim and nought breaks the silence but the faint crackling I close my eyes now unable to see i hear gentle breathing from just next to me I look to the side and lying right there is the one that i love and i touch her long hair So soft and so real my heart skips a beat as she stirs and awakens and then our eyes meet She smiles a slow smile still not quite awake and i feel that she loves me and there's no mistake I smile in return and gaze into her eyes and she gazes back and i see her face rise As her lips approach me and then as we kiss i want to stay always in this moment of bliss The intensity of love brings a tear to my eye she looks up again and says please don't cry And as we lie down in front of the flame my heart fills with love converted from pain The bliss that i feel is due solely to her she changed the way that me and pain were |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This touched me...I really liked this piece!! Well, written!! WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Beautiful. |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
With the title, I honestly didn't expect anything so sweet and nostalgic. Jhonbus, I too am inspired to write by so many songs I listen to... and I do like the Eels . This was so nice, thank you for sharing! |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
J..this was wonderful!..i didnt expect such a piece as this with a title as that..! you do good dreams hugs, dg she doesnt want the kind of love she can live with--she wants the kind she cant live without -clint black |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jhon~ A very tenderly done render. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Jhonbus Junior Member
since 2000-10-12
Posts 25Sheffield UK |
well I'm very glad you liked it so much! I just listened to "jeannie's diary" also by eels, and my typing finger is itching already... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is touching...I liked it alot...let's give it another spin...*wink* back to page one |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
JH~ beautiful poetry you've penned here. i could relate to this one oh so well. in our dreams things are often as should be until alas we have to awake to real life *sighs*. here's hoping your dreams turn into reality. take care. amy "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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