Open Poetry #7 |
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A Simple Girl |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida ![]() |
She loves her forest, ‘tis where she belongs Her eyes dance in dappled shades of green As she drinks the sunlight through the trees First hearing the noise through the screen Head cocked to the side, eyes a’squint She takes in this strange new sound A croon it seems, blurred by miles A static lull, a distant hum, a weary resound Decision made, she takes a step – a step – a step Precision made each place in mossy loam Though shaking trembling inside her gut To search out, nay find, that which draws her from home The simple girl strolls a forest path Leading outwards from its heart Each step, a step further from home Each breath, a tremble at this new start The sound is melancholy, but chimes in hope And its subtle persistence makes her smile Her heart lifts occasionally, to sing along in harmony This single moment perfect – makes the distance worthwhile Alas though, the sound begins to draw away Each day she hears its song less and less A pang of regret laced with a sigh, and she Moves along her journey, continuing her progress Though slightly sad, she knows change - the only truth And sometimes that which pulls things apart – yet Leaves an imprint, a mark, a lovely little treasure To hold on to for life, to never ever forget A step – a step – a step, head pointed down She notices the landscape changing fast Where soft spongy loam was spread, is Dark earthen rock – her mouth parts in a gasp Standing still, in a second – an instant flash She saw perfect her trees married into this rocky terrain All meshed in browns and greens, no beginning – no end And she wept for a Love so pure an’ without refrain For a brief moment in time, she truly feels safe Within the embrace of a moss’ed rocky niche She falls…to sleep, the deepest of all deeps Then for once, her heart beats without a hitch Stirring, pulling, slightly touching her mind She wakes to a disoriented surprise ‘Tis the sound – but closer much closer Surrounded now by before’s and reprise In breaking step she makes it to a cliff She sees the whole of the world before her Standing on outside edge of her forest green Through tears at first, all is a blur The girl calms, vision returns, all is clear Before her stretches a glorious sight abound To the left, the rocky shore – standing stoic, tall The right, the ocean – and its lulling sound In trembling fear she finally sees The vast expanse of these grandiose things And what it means for her to be Standing, insignificant – out of her league The ocean saturates in deepest blues Affecting everything that it is around Always changing, she could almost lose herself In those depths though, she would surely drown The rocky cliffs spread vast, for miles Against this fortitude, all else does pall Such strength held stoic for eternity From those heights though, she would surely fall She knows now what she must do And musters up her own personal song She gathers the treasures they gave her in heart And goes back to her forest, ‘tis where she belongs |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Satiate...wow. Wonderful epic, not to mention moral. ![]() Yes, it is good to explore, but sometimes what we seek can only be found at home. Alicat |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Well, certainly a complex poem for a simple girl. The ocean is mystifying in it's call, isn't it? Almost as alluring as the crystal blue sky winking down on you, eh? - especially when the alternative is just some craggly old bluffs. Me thinks one wouldn't fall if they weren't walking so close to the edge, though. From your seclusion in the forest I wonder will you see the ebbing of the tide, though. If you might then realize the transcience of such flitting waves. I wonder if you will see the rocky cliffs standing unscathed by yet another betrayal. Excellent poem, Satiate... gives one thought to ponder. Michael |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Lovely, Satiate. netswan |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is one of your best! The deeper meaning is so clear to me and you've laid it out so perfectly. Sometimes it's good to stay where you're safest, but then how would you know if you don't reach out for that dream? A marvelous poem! |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Satiate~ Such a lovely and lilting tale. This is really delightful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Satiate, this was worth every second it took to read it. Great imagery i feel. ~~very nice writing~~~ dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful my friend. . . A true lesson for all of us. . . sometimes, you have to step out and sometimes you have to just stay where you are. . . Excellent poem!! --------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This poem captivated me...from beginning to end...Excellent! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I probably shouldnt, but I will say it anyway. Though you may walk away from it, it will never walk away from you. Where you belong is where you are. Be that here, there, anywhere. "Home is where the heart is." From the zig-zag of the subjects thoughts, I get the impression that she isn't really sure WHERE her heart is, so she opts to go back "home," (can I substitute for solitude?) in order to avoid the possibility of hardship/pain/whatever. Well written in epic proportions suited to a woman who is many things, but certainly not simple. ![]() |
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