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Happily Never After |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Far across fertile fields and raging rivers Through woods filled with wooden slivers Underneath the bluest of skies Lies a castle built of stone and timber Proudly does the heralding flags fly Brightly does the sun ever shine here Washing over the merry people clear Rising up in the middle of the castle, a tower Strong and tall, an example of the royal power Parapets placed upon the top like a crown The princess within, spends every waking hour Forlornly looking out, and down Fingers working the loom, spinning through time Anything to ease her heavy, burdened mind Below the tower, the people move unknowing Their faces beaming, a happy countenance showing Going about with everyday cares While up above, constant tears flowing A still and stifling silence in the air As she waits with hands clasped saintly, Waiting for her prince to return, patiently |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Far across fertile fields and raging rivers Through woods filled with wooden slivers Underneath the bluest of skies Lies a castle built of stone and timber Proudly does the heralding flags fly Brightly does the sun ever shine here Washing over the merry people clear Rising up in the middle of the castle, a tower Strong and tall, an example of the royal power Parapets placed upon the top like a crown The princess within, spends every waking hour Forlornly looking out, and down ---------------------- While up above, constant tears flowing A still and stifling silence in the air As she waits with hands clasped saintly, Waiting for her prince to return, patiently ------------------ wow the imagery in this one is excellent jer, very well detailed and drawn with your poets pen this is a bit of a different kind of poem for you...I like the fantasy, fairy tale feel of it. I relate to this ones emotions well, ...have you been peeking in my castle windows *S* you know us chicks... always waiting for our princes and poets to come to us  excellent poem. your jm Is it too much to find an answer, Is it too much to hold you close. Is it too much to find a reason, Is it too much to free my soul -- From self control ... And I know you're always waiting for me ... You take me far away, And I know you're holding me ... And it's better now ... ~vertical horizon~ |
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Boovoltz New Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 8 |
I like it.  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JML, This was excellent!! Love the story you have told. Just drew me right in from the start...wow. Great writing!!!  Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank ya'll very much. I may need to write more about that princess. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Okay JML-you started the tease. I know you got it in you-Write us a story Please. Your bud kitkat |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Ok...you've got us hooked in ...so when's the sequel???? THe imagery surrounding this tale was excellent, set the scene, and in a few lines you set our imaginations wondering what will happen to that sad princess who waits. "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time that you've never had it before." ~author unknown~ |
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