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A Lifetime Ago
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A Lifetime Ago |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
A Lifetime Ago: I still remember, though it seems like a lifetime ago, When you and me, crazy and free, Sang to the moon, screamed to the sky, Laughed at the world without knowing why. Danced in the meadows and rode on the wind, I still remember how it was then, But it seems like a lifetime ago. I still remember Those days and those nights, How we mocked the whole word, And our magic play-fights. How we swam in the sky, played catch with the moon. How everyone said "They'll get over it soon. Yes, soon they'll grow up, and grow out of this phase." And we knew they considered us mildly crazed, But we thought we had lifetimes to go. I still remember the end of it all, When you wanted to fly, But you learned you could fall. When reality sparked in the back of your mind, And you said in a voice that was sad, And yet kind: "I don't want to play anymore. It's the end of the road, And I'm closing the door, And I know I can't play anymore. I remember the day when we proved they were right. When I learned that oppression Is stronger then light. When we gave up the moon, Bid farewell to the stars, And entered the world of airplanes and cars, Of drugs and of blood, Of smoke and of booze, And we almost forgot what we'd once had to lose. Then it seemed like a lifetime ago. I still remember the night when I asked, If we'd ever go back to those days long past. Could we escape this hell we were in? Would I live to dance with the stars again? I remember you as you shook your head. "Never again, or perhaps when we're dead. Though I'd rather be dead then here in this place." I watched a tear roll down your face. "Yes, I meant what I said, and I'd rather be dead." That was a lifetime ago. "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh |
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sweetchild Junior Member
since 2000-04-19
Posts 37 |
Isn't it sad that when we stop playing pretend and see the world for what it is that we want to go back or even "rather be dead." Touching and thought provoking, very good. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad and touching poem, Daysleeper! Welcome to Passions! Denise |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Thank you, sweetchild and dsnyder, for your words of encouragement, and thank you for reading my poetry. I appreciate it very much. ...Daysleeper... "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Daysleeper, I must say that this is one of the best poems I have seen presented on this site. The idea behind it is perfect, the flow is perfect, and the phrases that you use and the manner in which you use them is nothing short of brilliant. I eagerly look forward to seeing more of your work...... |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Balladeer- Aww, shucks... *blushing and scuffing my feet.* Thanks so much for that.  ...Daysleeper... |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
THIS.......is awesome Daysleeper! Welcome to Passions and I also look forward to more from you!  ~Sheri |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Irie, Ach! Greatly honored, I am! Thank you, thank you, thank you. *grinning and bowing* ...Daysleeper... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Welcome to passion,nice poem!!!!!! |
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lyst New Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 1Dallas, Texas |
Daysleeper, that was BEAUTIFUL.... I really identified with it. Very well written - it flowed perfectly. |
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Daysleeper Member
since 2000-04-23
Posts 119 |
Thank you all! I appreciate the warm welcome! "Presently I've had enough of all your sanity." -James Kavanaugh |
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