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Mother Earth (Some sort of Earth Day challenge response)
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Mother Earth (Some sort of Earth Day challenge response) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Mother Earth show my worth Hold me in your embrace And crush me under the weight Of your love, my fate I need to know if I lived in vain For what else is there? But to allow myself to die this way And return forlorn to the air Long have I lived like this, Eternal, the state I am in My suffocation is my bliss This knowledge is my sin I need only to lie on your ground And let you wrap me up In wind with arms all around Until I choose to give up Oh Mother, please come and smother Take me, your long lost something other And crush me under the weight Of love that feels like hate |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"My suffocation is my bliss This knowledge is my sin" This is lovely and powerful writing! A poetic plethora of images and sensory submission. Beautiful, JML... ~ Claire |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Eternal, the state I am in My suffocation is my bliss This knowledge is my sin I need only to lie on your ground And let you wrap me up In wind with arms all around Until I choose to give up Oh Mother, please come and smother Take me, your long lost something other And crush me under the weight Of love that feels like hate ---------------- ahhhh the beauty of your words... like a summer breeze I inhale them in... like oxygen -- you are.  I choose not to exhale *S* beautiful and perfect...intense as well nature's beauty is this powerful... excellent jer, stalking you on earth,*S* your jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well, what they said. Very powerful, I'm not sure exactly the message to be honest, maybe an acknowledge of my sins and take me to your justice, I accept my fate in your hands. Way too powerful for my mind, and deep. JML thank you for this submission, now I'm going to have to think all day. Well not much worry there...  Challenge very well met. Parker |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
This is crushing. RLOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
HAPPY EARTH DAY JER, BTTT Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this was a great poem! i say challenge very well met Jerry! Great work.... could someone PLEASE tell me what BTTT stands for...(Jan?) Its driving me crazy!!! Take care, AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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