Open Poetry #7 |
I Miss You |
David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
I Miss You She waves farewell and softly fades from view As morning raindrops pelt my windowsill. Still one more day to sadly bid adieu But one day more to love her as I will. To greet the day alone with one recourse I ache for her enchanting, limpid voice. While firmly gripped by sadness and remorse For one enslaved surrenders any choice. But sure reward is patience manifest And wait I must for just one searing kiss, Withstanding what must be love's fiercest test To wither in torrential heated bliss. Each day anew I'll face this tiring plight Until she lies beside me through the night. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~David oh sweetie this one crys a song of sadness. i know how this feels my friend. just hold on tight and keep the faith okay. some things really are worth waiting for! take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I miss you too..*smile* this is so gorgeous in its longing and devotion... >>And wait I must for just one searing kiss, Withstanding what must be love's fiercest test To wither in torrential heated bliss.<< my goodness i hope shes not gone too long... i fear you might self combust. >>I ache for her enchanting, limpid voice.<< wow what a line that is beautiful David, truly exquisite later-sonnet sire gator jm |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
David: A worthy sonnet -- I was most impressed with the exactness of your iambic pentameter. Rarely have I seen such flawless meter here. Well done! --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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nando Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden |
David I know how you feel... My girl just left for the summer, and the apartment is yet again an empty place... "Each day anew I'll face this tiring plight Until she lies beside me through the night" Just what I´m thinking about, but it´s worth the wait...Trust me... -nando- Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday... |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
nice poem to someone being missed...I miss her touch,smile,curious eyes,patient ways...she was beautiful though she found another..leaving me incomplete.. Sincerely A_L |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow...David, you never dissappoint me with your works, especially not your sonnets |
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emmalouise Junior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 26 |
David2, This one left me breathless. I was utterly transported into the mind and heart of the poet. It is bittersweet indeed to be separated from the one whom you adore and long to be with above all else. It is during those times that one must rely on fond memories of sheer and perfect bliss... Please do not stop adorning this site with your gorgeous words. emma |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David2~ Sheer perfection of thought, meter and rhyme. Delightful to the ear. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I believe when you really care for someone absence can make the heart grow fonder...the desires long to share the pleasures only togetherness can bring. James |
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