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Honeybee
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0 posted 2000-06-05 02:55 PM


*Usually, I would consider this finished, but for some reason, I am not completely happy with it, I know, I'm such a perfectionist.  If anyone has any suggestions please share them with me!  Or if you feel that it is okay the way it is, let me know   Thanks!

~THRUSH SONG HAIKU~

5-7-5

The song of a thrush -
bellowing her heart's desire
such splendid beauty!

*By Melissa Honeybee*

© Copyright 2000 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-06-05 03:16 PM


Well, I don't have any suggestions, but it IS beautiful, Melissa!

Elizabeth


 And this I say to you: why? Why? Just tell me why, so I can understand. Why?



Honeybee
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2 posted 2000-06-05 08:57 PM


Thank you Elizabeth, I guess that my haiku is okay afterall  

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

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3 posted 2000-06-05 09:01 PM


~Ok???...It is so much more than ok....it's wonderfully beautiful.  Thank you for sharing it. *Peace.
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