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You, a River
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You, a River |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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You a river, fields and woodland surrounded, here I reside in spirit Like a swan that glides imperfectly upon the rise and fall of you, I struggle to feed and survive from the banks of your flow I'll travel your waters upstream and down like a water-bird I will live the rush of you Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Such serenity and flow...a lovely poem..makes me literally write slower..smile...listen for the rush of water. Beautiful!  |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this was simply a waterfall of emotion, I loved it!!!! Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
WOW...This is very well written May your rivers always run deep and never become dry. Happy days  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ Absolutely BEAUTIFUL ! What a flow of emotion ... I love the way your thoughts carried me. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Dark Angel, This is a nice one here, I am glad I read it. Loved these lines: I'll travel your waters upstream and down like a water-bird I will live the rush of you Regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Angel girl, your words leave a rush of emotion. This is totally awesome!! 'I will live the rush of you.' Most excellent line! |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
I loved the poem, it has a great rythem and the deep metaphors made me shiver with delight, absolutely beutiful in everyway . Why is it I can never find this feeling myself ? Thanks for making me juder . L.of.L. Tom . ( I am going to try doing a smiley so it may not work ) . ;-) Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~What a beautiful, beautiful poem. *I will live the rush of you.... *I love this. Take care. *Peace. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, I think this is one of my favorites of yours...just so perfectly well-done!! Bravo! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sharon, thanks so very much hon and also for the beautiful E-card your comments always mean so much.Irish Rose, glad you loved it! Thank you! Tracie, Thanks hon Marge, I'm glad to hear that my thoughts did carry you Thank you! Sudhir, glad you liked, thank you! Hey Angel girl, Thank you for your lovely reply Angelswings, Wow, glad to have made you shuder!! Thank you for your lovely reply, I do appreciate it so. Spitfire, Thank you, Peace WOW, thank you Martie! Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DA, I am riding that wave of water behind you, my friend. Great images and beaultiful writing!! Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is stunning, and I want this one, Maree! Into my library! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
me too--- "Or, like the thief of fire from heaven, |
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