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deleeme
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since 1999-10-09
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NEW ENGLAND, USA

0 posted 2000-06-03 11:22 AM


Oh, a stopping place
All rolled out for me waiting
I think I'm attached!

Looks like all is clear
Right out here in the open--
Swat!(now that's dead wrong)!


 "GOD GIVES- but man must open his hand." (German Proverb)


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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-06-03 11:24 AM


You are dead right, David
I haven't mastered the haiku yet
But I can swat a fly
This is delightful
Liz

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-06-03 11:31 AM


Very good!!! I love this.  
ellie LeJeune
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3 posted 2000-06-03 11:44 AM


Dear David; What a delightful surprise! This is very funny! LOL! Are there an inordinate amount of flies in Michigan? I'm glad you got there safely, Bro. Love, Big Sis

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Marge Tindal
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4 posted 2000-06-03 05:25 PM


David~
Very nicely done
Swatting at flies on the run
Landing zone is clear

Enjoyed your humor !
~*Marge*~


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Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
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5 posted 2000-06-03 10:28 PM


Now just look at yourself!! Aren't you having fun and this is a GREAT one. Your humor is swatting around. (What is a Haiku?)
Really, really like this one.  Miss ya!marcy

Denise
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6 posted 2000-06-03 10:35 PM


I haven't been able to do these either. Glad to see that you gave it a try, David! Very cute!

Denise

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