Open Poetry #7 |
Farewell |
Rhavin Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 28 |
The crimson fluid that runs through these veins Is the same liquid that will be dispelled when I’m slain As the sword’s blade twists in my flesh I’ve made to many mistakes now to regret Tears of contentment flood my eyes No longer do I have to wish to die As I lye on the ground in a pool of dripping blood It mixes into the dirt and becomes a warm mud Not knowing what hurts worse, I wipe the blood from my face With my arms outstretched I welcome death’s embrace The clouds darken, and a storm rumbles in The story unfolds, but I don’t know where to begin People walk by, and stare in awe They think as they pass that glory I sought But in truth it was more like a love hate connection With not much more than a solitude redemption The pain in my soul has been lifted off my chest No more nights crying as I watch the stars from the crest Farewell to my life filled with this lingering pain Nothing more to tell, I’m dead where I lay |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Painful, but powerful. Very good writing. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Welcome to Passions, Rhavin! dark - deep poem -- well written ~netswan |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is a perfect description of a situation I went thru about 9 years ago...it was no fun for me and I hope this was in your past. James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow, this is exceptional writing dark and painful indeed, but the emotions and the ryhme are expressed with poetic precision. I hope you find your release in your writing welcome to passions I look forward to more of your work, take care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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