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I Would Explain the Sky
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I Would Explain the Sky |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I would Explain the Sky There are so many big things and yet I squint and catch some small winking just waiting for explanation. I would explain the sky, yet one small star holds me and whispers of shadows that stars make on night sky’s dark plane and the music in the void that causes angel’s to weep, it whispers of treasure and to imagine an opening where brilliance falls all around like marbles gay and melting color. There are so many dusty roads and this one time I found a dull stone shaped like a heart, not perfect but obvious, and it enlightened me and quenched my romance in a perfect minute. There are questions popping all around like bubbles the big hand blows sweet wind wild wind….hot wind, treacherous wind and I lean into truth as if I could see it there with some enormous righteous intent displaying obvious answers invisible answers that I have to walk around and study with creased and pressed thought Because sometimes simple is so complicated [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-01-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh what a gorgeous poem you have penned Martie. a dull stone shaped like a heart, not perfect but obvious, and it enlightened me and quenched my romance in a perfect minute. so beautiful! < !signature--> Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-01-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I would explain the sky, yet one small star holds me and whispers of shadows that stars make on night sky’s dark plane and the music in the void that causes angel’s to weep, they whisper of treasure and to imagine an opening where brilliance falls all around like marbles gay and melting color. Martie a wonderful poem, I think often that we try so hard to explain things that we forget to just enjoy them. So instead of explaining why I loved this poem, I am going to read it again and enjoy its beauty again. great poem. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh) "Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir The applause nails down my silence La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory People send postcards And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I sold my medal It paid a bill It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks The sadness will never go Will never go away Baby it's here to stay |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, You TAKE MY BREATH AWAY!!! But, oh! That second verse, Martie, that second verse! What splendor you create! And tell me, where do these beautiful notions come from? The never-ending fountain of magical whims, only in your mind, for nobody writes like this And oh! That second verse! Don't get me wrong, I loved them all But OH! That second verse! What else can I say? Liz |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Martie, Just fabulous words flowing from your pen today. I love this one. Perfect throughout.  Beautiful writing!!Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Is there a more beautiful poem here today, I don't think so! Perfect!  |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Martie, So deep, yet so simple too. I love the way you have so brilliantly explained this contradiction. Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
sometimes simple is so complicated... me thinks that sometimes the beauty of simplicity is what we ought to be seeking. Your ability to take a single thought, or snapshot of your life, and transform it into a work of poetic splendor is a gift the rest of us are extremely fortunate to be able to experience. Have a nice day my friend. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
What a nice poem! I like the bit about the single star stopping you short of explaining the sky. I am new to writing poetry, so everyone please bear with me, I won't know all the lingo for a bit... |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Speaking of brliiance, I stand in awe of yours, Martie, and you are definitely not one star short of it. This is so good..... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dark Angel--Thank you so much for reading and commenting on the things that I write...I appreciate it. Brian--I'm so glad you could just enjoy this poem. Liz--I don't want to take away your breath...just give you some...thank you for your enthusiasm!! Lone Wolf--Thanks for such a wonderful comment. PdV--There are many more beautiful, but thank you, you gave me a Wow. Lori--life is full of contradictions--so glad you enjoyed. Mike--Simple things are the easiest to comprehend---You are a sweet friend! fracta---thank you for reading my poem--your reply was great. Welcome to Passions! Deer--speaking of brilliance, your reply was! |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Martie, you inspire me to write. I love to write about the sky and romance. You poem reminds me about one small star that holds me. Everytime I look into the sky, I see the stars in just one part of the sky, whispering and calling to me. This poem really makes me think about those thoughts. Thank you for writing it so well....  Parker |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ How you shine .... 'I would explain the sky, yet one small star holds me and whispers of shadows that stars make' Just too, too pretty. You make the words dance. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was stunning Martie! So many questions, so few answers, the complication of simplicity, the imagery, the sounds I can almost hear myself ... you took me right into this one Martie ... beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You are amazing, Martie! The second verse is my most favorite, as well! I shall never look at the sky the same way again! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I would explain the sky, yet one small star holds me and whispers of shadows that stars make on night sky’s dark plane and the music in the void that causes angel’s to weep, it whispers of treasure and to imagine an opening where brilliance falls all around like marbles gay and melting color. ---------------- and I lean into truth as if I could see it there with some enormous righteous intent displaying obvious answers invisible answers that I have to walk around and study with creased and pressed thought Because sometimes simple is so complicated -------------- this poem is sheer brillance your eyes see the things many of us miss... that is what makes your poetry so special. expectional words here take care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
dont mind me... just doing some late night reading... wanted to add this fav to my personal Library way cool feature Ron gives us huh?  So is the poets search mode of sweet Ceres LOL |
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