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Icicles - by request, for LngJhnAg
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Icicles It gave you pleasure melting my resistance, shining in the sparkle you found in my eyes, a twinkling treasure Partially hidden from view, wrapped in glossy paper you tore away layers, ribbons untied Held this gift in your gaze, touched outer layers, slipped in skillfully, heat replaced cold, closed my eyes to milky ways I have often wished upon you like some far off star in the wintry sky, and thought, Darlin’, if you only knew © 1999 Corinne Bailey |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow!! Absolutely wonderful, Corinne. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
wow as well fantastic especially the first stanza It gave you pleasure melting my resistance, shining in the sparkle you found in my eyes, a twinkling treasure ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers La Tristesse Durera (Scream to a Sigh) "Life has been unfaithful And it all promised so so much I am a relic I am just a petrified cry Wheeled out once a year, a cenotaph souvenir The applause nails down my silence La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I see liberals I am just a fashion accessory People send postcards And they all hope I'm feeling well I retreat into self-pity, it's so easy Where they patronise my misery La tristesse durera Scream to a sigh, to a sigh I sold my medal It paid a bill It sells at market stalls Parades Milan catwalks The sadness will never go Will never go away Baby it's here to stay |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful writing, Corinne. Really enjoyed it!!  LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Jana Tovey Member
since 2000-05-30
Posts 257USA |
Good writing, Corine. I like the references to love being a gift. It is, too bad more people don't realise this. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Thank you, Corinne - this is one of my favorite poems, and definitely deserved another read. That last line is a killer line. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I have often wished upon you like some far off star in the wintry sky, and thought, Darlin’, if you only knew -------------- OH man...what an amazing verse that is girl!! awesome poem C, your wrote my heart in this one for sure... always excellent. tkae care, jm There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
This is a very subtle sensual poem, that hints at mystery.... I wonder if just like the author.... Parker |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you, Martie, Brian, Lone Wolf, Jana, Janet Marie and Park! And thank you especially, LngHhnAg, glad you enjoyed! Corinne |
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