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Open Poetry #7

Was I wrong

jbowie
Member

since 2000-02-18

Posts 135
BANGOR (that OR) ME

0 posted 2000-04-20 10:43 AM

The tinny rasping
of sleet striking glass
comes in frequent waves
shifting about
in the unpredictable wind

As this cadence continues
I turn my neck
until it cracks
to relieve the cold tension
driven into my bones

I look to the floor,
painted in blood
are the last moments
of the intruder
who came into my home

My hand goes limp
the gun falls
as I back into the corner
and pray
for God to forgive me

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

1 posted 2000-04-20 02:31 PM

Very tragic, James. Defending our homes is never wrong. Great writing.

Denise

Nate Dogg
Senior Member

since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

2 posted 2000-04-20 04:59 PM

Wow, this is a very powerful piece!

Nathan

Temptress

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-06-15

Posts 7136
Mobile, AL

3 posted 2000-04-20 05:46 PM

I enjoyed reading this. As for being wrong or not. Sometimes its hard to say, but we must defend ourselves right? If the event in this poem actually happened I hope you will find a way to cope.

Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau"

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