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My first poem (response to Kits challenge)
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My first poem (response to Kits challenge) |
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killer222 Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 48Northolt,Middlesex,England |
Unfortunately poetry was not really touched upon in my school  . I did not take an interest in poetry until I was 16. This is the first poem I ever wrote Past hope Everything is quiet No sounds can be heard A sign on the door in front of me Says please do not disturb I turn the handle slowly The atmosphere is dead And as I look inside I see A old man in a bed Slowly walking through the door I take a look around I see no movement from the bed Just a letter on the ground I pick it up and read it I feel a tear in my eye It tells a story of despair By a man who wants to die The world is such an evil place It gets worse every day A place so full of pain and woe No one wants to stay The old man in the bed has gone He is finally at rest A man who took a look at life And thought suicide was best 1994 "shun the frumious Bandersnatch!" Killer222 :) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Why was your first poem about suicide? |
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killer222 Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 48Northolt,Middlesex,England |
My exam results were not what I had hoped and home life wasn't good. I kept my emotions deep down and I needed to get them out in the open. That is the main reason I started writing "shun the frumious Bandersnatch!" Killer222 :) |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a heart-wrenching response to the "first/early poem challenge". You appear to have allowed yourself to get out your emotions at such a young age. It is such a blessing, being able to write and think through your feelings. Your title "Past Hope", makes me believe that since this was your first poem about 6 years ago, that you were able to win your battles and "found" hope. I'm so glad you did ... keep writing ... you have a talent! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 05-31-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
A very good first poem...poetry, or almost any writing, does wonders for the soul...this is very painful and well-expressed. Thanks for sharing, Killer. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
An amazing first poem, you dug deep into your soul and penned it with acute pain and feeling. I know writing helped carry me out of the darkness many times and I hope it does the same for you. Thank you for sharing this. |
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