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~Sweet Surrender~
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~Sweet Surrender~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
His words dance and rise with grace upon the page, beckoning to my heart ... his invitation for desires to engage. His rhymes enchant me ... their promises to entice and linger, his verses entwine golden rings of love gently thru my fingers. I long to see love through his poetic, gifted, eyes, to share his vision, his dreams, to then see where my future lies. To know his secrets, to touch the core of his soul's essence, to be consumed and contented by the grace of his presence. Just to know the gifts of his passion's pleasures, to touch, to taste, to discover his sensual treasures. Should fate grant this chance ... his every fantasy I wish to fulfill, would my dreams come true as this desire overtakes my will. By his every word conceived ... I am captivated, Transfixed on his offerings ... I am fascinated. Baptize me in the sweet depths of his poetic cascade, I surrender to the temptations as all my resistance fades. Janet Marie There are places inside our souls ... that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts ... that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ I baptise thee ... Well, dunk you in the baptismal waters of Poetic Lust ! *On a more serious note ... nicely done, fair friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Oh, Janet Marie, this is by far the nicest poem anyone has ever written about me! I am truly grateful and will always...huh?...it's not?.....er, well, it's still a wonderful poem! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
WOW!!!! Baptize me in the sweet depths of his poetic cascade, I surrender to the temptations as all my resistance fades. Excellent lines!! How true how true....ahhhhhhh!!! The words of poetry melt even the coldest heart...forget the dimonds and flowers....send me poetry from you heart!! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janet~ This was such a love swept poem which just made me melt when I read. Very dreamy in deed. Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Janet Marie ... extremely well done, loved your wording, especially the last two lines. Wonderful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
now,now Janet Marie, try to let your emotions out. (chuckle). Come on over to Spirituals for a dunkin', then you can be on your way; (This was said in a spirit of fun) Great job, Marcy |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Fellow butterfly girl: what are lovely writer you are... beautiful! (And ignore Balladeer...  ) K |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
J. Marie, Oh, how "passionate"! I don't think I've seen this side of you, but it is definitely not disappointing. Everything you write just grabs hold of me girl! When I logged on this morning I was so happy to see you posted at the very top - right where you belong! Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I love it! Those poetic men sure can turn on the charm can't they (Balladeer included). Perhaps poetic men are more in touch with feelings and that makes us want to surrender to their poetic charms.  |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
A CLASSIC!!!! The poet must be a real lucky one to have such a feeling developed in another heart... Great work, Janet... Regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Lovely, I hope he hears you loud and clear, Janet Marie! That Balladeer, what a card, eh? Corinne |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jan-- wow!!! you went way deep with this one! i like, i like a lot lol. full of intense powerful emotion served janet style. you always seem to make me smile...thank you. really loved this poem, quite beautiful! love ya, amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
margie...LOL...YES INDEED -- LUST!!!  LoL TY for the read. Balladeer ... sshhhhh...now dont give away all my secrets ...LOL Lets keep them guessing. TY Butterfly ...yes gifts of poetry are the best...But diamonds run a close second LOL TY my SS Tracie ... TY hon, you always say the peferfect thing...glad I could melt ya LOL Kit ...TY for such a wondeful reply and always reading my work. Alle' LOL and TY...it was taken in the same spirit given!! Sev(butterfly sharer) ...TY for the read and lovely..but who could ignore sweet balladeer LOL Lori ...this side of me sneaks out every so often ... I gotta let her out so she can heat up and then cool off  lolTY for such kind complimenys my friend...enjoy your trip. Poet D ...YES..EXACTLY... love those romantic poets. Sud, .. thank you sir... me thinks Im the lucky one... Corinne, if he dont I GIVE UP ...LOL TY Amy..my one woman cheerleading section... TY for the smiles you send my way as well. THANK YOU ALL for the kind replies. jm |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jan-gator...this is really cool writing. Such passion and baptising all going on! Marina |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I am ready!!! Me next!! Janet, this was fabulous lusty writing!!! Great read!! Keep up the great work! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Margie, don't ya love it? Some great lines in this lusty piece Wow! Liz |
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