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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-05-30 02:45 AM


a little life for each of us
but never quite enough
a little taste of happiness,a touch a kiss
then pick up the mess and start over
finding another
cause shes too young or hes too old
my father says or my mother scolds
the wisdom they preach,god must always be..within reach
but we're in love,like you used to be
and your rules destroyed our dreams
your frigid logic..will always keep us lonely
hating you..why take this from us
who are you..to say im not good enough?




 "you can have my isolation..you can have the hate that it brings
you can have my absence of faith..you can have my everything"

"so impressed with all you do..tried so hard to be like you..flew too high and burnt the wing..lost my faith in everything"

"I am too connected to you to
Slip away, to fade away.
Days away I still feel you
Touching me, changing me,
And considerately killing me."

The Jackal


© Copyright 2000 John Dixon - All Rights Reserved
Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
1 posted 2000-05-30 03:23 AM


Well written sir. there is a lot of frustration in side and this poem lets it out real well. i can feel the imagery. i can almost hear your parents... and they sound a lot like mine.

keep up the good work. i dig it. and i dig you signatures, too. very snazzy.

 We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-05-30 11:59 AM


a little life for each of us
but never quite enough
a little taste of happiness,a touch a kiss
then pick up the mess and start over
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your frigid logic..will always keep us lonely
hating you..why take this from us
who are you..to say im not good enough?
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who indeed...
excellent thoughts here Jac,
as always, you go deep for them and capture the pain well.
later, jm

 There are places inside our souls ...
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts ...
that need to be loved this much.
~Janet Marie~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~


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