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Union 4 eternity
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Union 4 eternity |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Oh My! Now is that love or what!!! Wow, Wow and Wow! This was very well done Shilpi!  Incase you didn't notice, I really liked this a lot!  ~Sheri |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
So it is, so it is !! Irie, i appreciate you taking time to read and post ur response..... loadsa thanks shilpi |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mmm...destiny through eternity.... lovely, lovely work here... and oh I DO believe... thank you much... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Destiny it is, how they met....they met but for an instant One look was all it took....for their souls to be transparent Ahhh....this one's goin' to last, they knew, maybe forever !! ------ Excellent sentiments expressed in nice form....a addition...a few moments of inspiration...-------- Fate held a key to this door, A slit, an opening, the key hole, This door, opened up a new frontier, An eye blinked looked through the eye-hole, Waited patiently for another, The other eye stared, a caressed fluttering soul. Now the eyes had met, yet nothing was said, Love's emotions flowed, streams joined in a river, Silent expressions, sweet impressions, a raid, a foray into hearts, joining them, a momentary shiver, Two hearts held on tight, in love, souls becoming one, That this love is eternal, would last forever, is a given. ........ Regards, sudhir. Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"One look was all it took....for their souls to be transparent" Wonderful sentiments Shilpi ... I particularly liked the line above, where one can recognize and see into the other's soul in an instant ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
No, Thank "you" Serenity , your response means a lot !! shilpi Kit, yup, if they are meant for each other, they would be able to see....every hting, the flaws and the merits and most of all, the love !! Thankyou shilpi |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
Sudhir, you have no idea how good your lines are, infact, it is no addition.....It is one of its kind !!! Projecting so many emotions in those 2 stanzas..... shilpi |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hi, I just bettered my 12 lines into 14 and posted it, hope that you liked them...  well, they were inspired by this one for sure... so to me the source is the start, and the inspired work is an addition, don't you agree?? regards, sudhir Hey you, out there in the cold, Getting lonely, getting old, can you feel me? Hey you, standing in the aisle, With itchy feet and fading smile, can you feel me? Hey you, don't help them to bury the light. Don't give in without a fight. Hey you, out there on your own, Sitting naked by the phone, would you touch me? Hey you, with your ear against the wall, Waiting for someone to call out, would you touch me? Hey you, would you help me to carry the stone? Open your heart, I'm coming home.... by Roger Waters (Pink Floyd) - The Wall |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Shilpi~ Certainly enjoyed this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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shilpi Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 73 |
Marge, thankyou loads !! shilpi |
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