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Falling Awake (Revisited) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Falling AwakeSoft shadows on the window's sill as daylight's drawn a ragged breath Low calling of the whippoorwill first signs of spring amidst scents of death Finely fragrant, as dogwood teases the moistened morning's vision Succintly savors and somehow sees o'er the nearing apparition Draw nigh, come forth lost labouring soul, encumber not Perdition Unburden the sallow, ponderous load swelling full with each confession Lilt lightly upward, newly borne, all grace and tenderness bestowing Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn... your Freedom's come with Knowing  Claire |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is lovely Claire ... and I enjoyed how you entitled this verse. Nice work! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow, you certainly have a flow with your words Claire! Awesome!  K |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
flow??? I was white water rafting all the way through it!!! great job Kathleen [email protected] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh My, this is excellent, beautifully written. Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, Excellent poem, loved the title. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
beautiful Claire Rex |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Claire, this is breathtaking, full of hope and has such a gentle peacefulness about it. Very well written! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--Such a possitive, sensitive and remarkable poem. Wonderful! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Superb Claire, one can feel the touch of new day and the promises that it brings with these words. . . Wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Claire, Nice poem, great use of words. I love it when poets take advantage of the rich well of words available to them. I enjoyed this. David2 |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
You pen equally with splendor of the dawn as of the night. First signs of spring harken thee to exquisite beauty my friend. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kit, Severn, Kathleen, Dark Angel, Seymour, Rex, Denise, Martie, Sven, David, and Mike...thank you, in earnest, for reading this and responding with such lovely and encouraging returns. Today has been my birthday and I have been also preparing to move to the new (old!) house, so I have just now been able to connect online, only to find these delightful and generous remarks from each of you. I am so glad that you found something to enjoy in this piece and I thank you for letting me know. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you are a classic poet, claire this verse will stand the test of time... make sure you back it up and print it out in case your computer crashes... LOL it's superb lyric! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Doreen, thank you for such a kind response! What a lovely thing to say to a poet! So glad you enjoyed this piece, and I do thank you for letting me know. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Lilt lightly upward, newly borne, all grace and tenderness bestowing Embrace the cockcrow, the sudden morn... your Freedom's come with Knowing a fantastic poem, beautiful images and I love the title "falling awake." ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Do not listen to a word I say Just listen to what I can keep silent" Nicky Wire |
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