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Open Poetry #7

answering machine

svtcobra
Junior Member

since 2000-05-23

Posts 14
Syracuse,NY USA

0 posted 2000-05-25 02:06 AM

Received the message you left
The voice I wanted to hear
Hanging on every word
Excited to see you tonight

Not going to be here much longer
Got out early
Wanting to know where I am
Hoping I'll go out for a drink

Message was left an hour ago
Cant call you
Got your number
But you live with him

Friends call
They want to go out
No longer in the mood
Just going to stay home

Maybe I'll see you tonight
In my sleep
You are always in my dreams
There we are together

mitymopr
Junior Member

since 2000-05-24

Posts 14

1 posted 2000-05-25 02:11 AM

hell yeah due, this almost beats 3 f'ing thirty

netswan
Senior Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 1369
Washington

2 posted 2000-05-25 06:38 AM

svt,

"Message was left an hour ago
Can't call you
Got your number
But you live with him"

This poem is tight with emotional pain.

~netswan

ESP
Member Elite

since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

3 posted 2000-05-25 07:38 AM

Whoa....this one is jam packed with emotional pain. Very well written.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie

"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

4 posted 2000-05-25 07:42 AM

So close and yet so far ... you've said it all Svtcobra ... well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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