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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Never, have I said: "Complete." Never has my heart beat three. And no, not I, to be confused-- 'concession speech' (It's true...I lose...) No, not once, when heart beat twice, did ever whisper I: "Suffice..." I yearn my heart beat time to one. (Creation--all would be undone...) Methinks you WANT (for me to bleed...) Chalice--empty--craving seed... Empty I, awaiting fate-- (amongst the dogs, I leave full plate...) puzzled by their need. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Jeez, sen, you get the notion of love's (yearning's, lust's, whatever's) confusion perfectly here. Did someone really say you wrote pedestrian poetry? Then get out the crosswalk STOP signs, and beat whoever said that over the head with them.  Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you Mike you really don't know how much this means to me...but if you keep calling me sen.---I shall have to start calling myself Senator Serenity...now NOBODY wants that....(and you are definetely cheering me up, luv, thank you...) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
wow senator this is beat me in the pants great stuff in a canyon in a cavern excavatin for a mine dwelt a miner forty niner and his daughter clemintine!!! yeehaw! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Okay, I see yr point. S'en it is. Mike |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Bleeding isn't necessry as you have given up so much in this poem already. very well done "hugs" Rich |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Never, have I said: "Complete." Never has my heart beat three. ------------- No, not once, when heart beat twice, did ever whisper I: "Suffice..." I yearn my heart beat time to one. (Creation--all would be undone...) Methinks you WANT (for me to bleed...) Chalice--empty--craving seed... ------------- where did ya get that mirror... its looks so familiar *smile* oh me twin... you know that I know that you know...(oh no). puzzeled??? oh yes ...but then if we understood it... we wouldnt want it...or need it...or crave it... if we understood it...we would know better  i know, you know... later me sweet twin gator jm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks again to my friends fer yer support... and walt...what a nice suprprise to hear from you, as I'm a big fan of yours...thanks... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Enjoyed the read, cheer up, nice poem. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
you write so beautiful ... and express such sorrow ... your thoughts are very intoxicating to the reader Rex |
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Crystal Lynn Junior Member
since 2000-05-21
Posts 18Miami, FL. USA |
its hard to capture thoughts on paper..but you seem to be able to do it with ur eyes shut...great poem i look forward to reading others... crystal |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
serenity, a great poem. I love the line, Chalice--empty--craving seed... fantastic read. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, wow I must agree with the above great poem, great read, just love the form. seed awaiting chalice-need.... Parker |
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