Open Poetry #7 |
Of daffodils and lilies |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Of daffodils and lilies From daffodils to lilies In the twinkling of an eye. I walk among the daffodils But my mind on lilies lie. From daffodils to lilies In the twinkling of an eye In the magic of the daffodils Are the seeds where lilies lie. My heart aches only daffodils My soul and love is in its lie But my mind envisions lilies And it weighs me down in sigh. Where once were only daffodils Shapely beds in timeless lie. Now drips dew off lily heads Dropping off the days gone by. I would among the daffodils But only lilies now comply. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Awake in bed of daffodils while lilies dream of Sy... Your work always gives one pause, Seymour...and I like the ruminations. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed the read as always. As Claire indicated, your work always has the catch to it that makes you think. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I never could decide between the two myself... This is great, Sy - and the important thing is to appreciate both for what they are while they're in bloom, is it not???... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Now this is perfection! What a thought provoking and beautifully written poem. The flow is perfect. And I, myself can't decide between lilies and daffodils, I appreciate the beauty of both, although lilies remind me of my Grandma. Take care, Melissa Honeybee [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 05-21-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
What a lovely poem! Spring turns a man's heart to the flowers in his soul....you have a way with words, Sy. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
They are both so beautiful in their own way...decisions, decisions...I can't decide either! I could be wrong (I usually am) but I also see in this 'the grass is greener...' theme. Regardless, wonderful writing, Sy! Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I love them both, Sy...each in its uniqueness and I always enjoy the flowering of your poetry. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ Your garden is a render of memories so tender. Glad that you have shared the rows of blooms of the past and the blooms of today. Just please 'Don't Eat The Daisies'. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all my wonderful friends. This one flew the coo coo nest Daffodils are the symbol of life And lilies are the ones of death. Read it again and get the true meaning I intended. *L* Then I would like your answers again. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Beautiful poem Sy, perfect rhyme and flow... BUT me thinks its much to soon for you to be thinking about Lilies... your still a rose in bloom... and a timeless poet. creative and clever poem here my friend. miles to go before you sleep...*smile* jm Some things cannot be explained by verses that rhyme, They are not measured by the commitment of time. Some emotions run too deep to be described by words, Forgiveness and understanding-remain the most beautiful words ever heard. ~Janet Marie~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
From daffodils to lilies, a beautiful poem with a hint of sadness, I prefer daffodils as well. magically images. ===================================== My heart aches only daffodils My soul and love is in its lie But my mind envisions lilies And it weighs me down in sigh. Where once were only daffodils Shapely beds in timeless lie. Now drips dew off lily heads Dropping off the days gone by. ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Oh, what a clever tongue twister! Corinne |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Okay, now I get it! I didn't know that daffodils were the symbol for life. Very good, Sy! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Thank you sweet. *L* Brian, Yes you caught the sad. thank you. Corinne, Thank you for the Oh what a. *L* Denise, Thank you for the second response. *L* |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I love daffodils also, the most fleeting passions are the ones that contain the most beauty and this is a classic example Kathleen [email protected] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Darling, Seymour~ You've done your gardening of life well. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Irish, If life is a fleeting passion then you are 100% right. Marge, I love you too. Sy |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I wish I had come and read sooner, Sy, for I knew where you were going with this one... for my mother despised the lilies my father had planted for she knew their true meaning... and always told us to not give her lilies, but to remember her with roses... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, You are the one candle in the dark. *L* |
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