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~Better Days~ New Horizons challenge, Jeffery and LW
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~Better Days~ New Horizons challenge, Jeffery and LW |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~Better Days~ Well, they say the road to hell is paved with good intentions, I've walked this road burdened ... with secrets and baggage that I cant mention. I've paid the price too many times now ... for someone else's sins, and I know all the games, and I know just cause you play by the rules ... sure as hell don't mean your gonna win. I have spent a lifetime trying to get back the things they took away, and I learned something's they took from me, are simply gone to stay. It took years to even begin ... to ever let myself feel trust ... to learn the difference between truth and lies, tired alibis, love and lust. I always knew I could do better than the examples that they set, I just refuse to be like them ... I haven't lost this bet, yet. So I cut all my losses and broke free of the ties that bind, I set out to find what was left of me, and to leave all this pain behind. Some days it does get hard, the voices still haunt me ... and I'm still learning that I am the only one who can truly set ~ME~ free. So I try to look forward and let go of all the sorrow, I refuse to let them have a hold on me ... they cant have my tomorrows. I can walk this road of life and not lose my own way ... I will have my run at the sun, and when I'm tired all I need to do is pray. So here's to NEW HORIZONS ... to breaking free and rising above ... here's to poetry ... true friends ... and here's to unconditional love. Here's to better days ... to kissing fate ... and dancing with destiny ... here's to happy endings ... here's to you ... and here's to me finally learning to love me. Janet Marie 5/17/00 thanks for the inspiration Jeffery and Lone Wolf for this... and for the idea of writing with someone else... your poems together inspired me and Brian Madden to write "Celestial Passions"... and we have plans to write others, and I also have plan to write with a few other fav poets... SEE what you started LOL THANKS.  "no more tears ... left to hide, we have made it thru a long and lonely nite, BETTER DAYS ... are on our sides... well, it looks as though we're doing something right. *melissa manchester* [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 05-18-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
Well, they say the road to hell is paved with good intentions, I've walked this road burdened ... with secrets and baggage that I cant mention. I've paid the price too many times now ... for someone else's sins, ---------------- I have spent a lifetime trying to get back the things they took away, and I learned something's they took from me, are simply gone to stay. It took years to even begin ... ------------------------------- This was Fantastic!! i loved every bit. i see the motto's and the stories of my life unfolding in your rhymes. this is amazing. i might have to put this in my file. =) Excellent job. PS i wanna do this challenge. where's the info? We all got somethin' we need to atone for. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
since you're writing from my heart again, m'twin...OOOH! Pick Me Next! I would so love to sing harmonies with you! Huh, Can I? Huh? Pretty please? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thanks Ethan, for such a great reply...I just sent you an Email telling you about challenge... serenity... YES BABY...lets DO put our lips together LOL I would love to write one with ya me twin. I'll e-mail ya...be thinking about what you want to write about... something cajun spicy I hope LOL |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Oh, this is perfect!! You've outdone yourself with this one. The hope shines through, the dream to have a better life, to finally embrace yourself. I love it! This describes my students so well. Your closing lines really touch my heart. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Janet, this is beautiful, as I see lots of soul-researching going on in this one.  That's what I like to call it. You touched on many sensitive points, but yet, you wrapped it up with such strength, grace and charm, you left me in awe! Fabulous read, and so glad you were inspired to do such a healing piece. Bravissimo! And btw, thank you for sticking it out on my new LONG story! hehehe You're the best girl! Have missed you terrible! Have had no inspiration, so I've been laying low. |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Dearest Jan; Are you sure we didn't grow up in the same house? I read this most incredible poem, and I felt like I was reading my life story. Goosebump city!!! You are so gifted and WOW, this is great!! Love, Ellie 02 |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was an excellent response to the challenge Janet Marie ... you've out-done yourself. This was so full of deep emotions, with such a positive outcome. Take care JM, and continue to hold your head high above the challenges you've faced. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
My life, your life, the all bleed into one But soon we shall walk in the sun A call of hope from beyond the heavens Let's go to Vegas cuz we'll roll 7's So Beautiful J.M.!! You tap into every feeling beating within my heart!! Not sure how ya do it....but my goodness DON'T EVER STOP  ]Love Ya~ **AW hugs** |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW.... and...em...wow.... Each line is a home truth, each one I know and can connect with me, that was amazing, I am stunned to silence. "I have spent a lifetime trying to get back the things they took away, and I learned something's they took from me, are simply gone to stay." "So I cut all my losses and broke free of the ties that bind, I set out to find what was left of me, and to leave all this pain behind. Some days it does get hard, the voices still haunt me ... and I'm still learning that I am the only one who can truly set ~ME~ free. So I try to look forward and let go of all the sorrow, I refuse to let them have a hold on me ... they cant have my tomorrows." These words I know so well, while gazing into your own soul I believe you also saw into mine. |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Janet ---You go Girl! Let those ghosts fly off your shoulders and always enjoy today - and look forward to tomorrow. So touching - and well written, of course. HUGS netswan |
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CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
Beautiful poem. So you took the road less traveled And you're better for it now You've managed to win the battle That fate would not allow Again beautifully done!!!! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
very nice. I loved it. extremly well done. best wishes, Effigy |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautifully done. Sometimes the hardest thing in life is to turn and walk towards a new horizon....you capture this feeling quite nicely!  |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Janet Marie, You have well exceeded the challenge put before you!!! Excellent piece!! I think I speak for Jeffrey too when I say that we are touched to have inspired such beautiful writing!!! This is amazing!! You are welsome for the idea of writing with someone else...Jeffrey gets the credit for that one. It is a lot of fun to do for sure!! We had a ball with ours and plan to do more. Glad to have started all this LOL You are most welcome and I hope I made the list of poets you would like to write with...love your work!!! LW |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Perfection of course!!! Did Gemini help? Marina |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
OMG....I LOVED THIS ONE Better days are yet to come ..without a doubt All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
THANK YOU my treasured poet friends... seems too many of us relate to hearing those voices from the past... but we are all here together, quiet comfort for each other... and Better Days on our side... thank you for such sweet replies of understanding. take care, love ya all, jm |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
BEG, sounds like you have grabbed life by the tale and your calling your own terms! It's the only way to fly! and i believe your about to soar, my poetic Eagle. with grace and strength you write your story determined after all to have your glory on your own two feet your ready to stand taking fate and destiny by the hand ~~excellent writing JM~~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
jm-- man i go away from passions for a few days and look at all the GOOD stuff i miss. i know im late in responding to this...im late with everything here lately it seems. i apologize to you and to everyone else as well. i LOVED this poem, simply LOVED it! it spoke to me in ways u can't even imagine...or maybe u can. thanks for posting this...and i look forward to reading your collaberation efforts with some of the other fine poets here at passions! love ya, amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I loved the use of mottos and cliches in this! Must have been a blast to write! Corinne |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"To breaking free and rising above..."... It works for me...  |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Here's to better days Janet....and don't ever give up your tomorrows! Not all those who wander are lost. ~J.R.R. Tolkien |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Here, here......to new horizons!!! I hear that. Great work here....so inspirational...good for you and thanks for sharing this. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Janet Marie....This is beautiful!!! Here's to chances and to new starts |
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rodger_jr Junior Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 37Glen Hope, PA |
Nice poem JM |
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