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Before Love
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Before Love |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Before Love A lifetime ago In times of swords and shields The spill of blood did flow Over meadows and silent fields He lay in the battlefield Angel of death, at his side His love unspoken and left concealed Mysteriously, a part of her, had died He never knew her name Never had they met He loved her just the same His life all but set Two souls together in rebirth A second chance from the Dove He had finally proved his worth So says the message from above Had we met, before love? Marina 2000 [This message has been edited by Marina (edited 05-17-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Once dead, twice risen, the power of love, is the message from the dove... This is a great one, Marina. True love searches your soul and entraps the body into the need to be reborn just to complete an unfinished task of making up for what couldn't have been otherwise, all in the name of love.... Regards, Sudhir. Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
girl..this is excellent..you are so good at this story telling and imagery...and then we will talk about the rhyme pattern here...perfection to say the least. VERY WELL WRITTEN!! way cool poem marina-gator later, jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Mysteriously a part of her had died." Lovely the way you have written these words of love. James |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Sudhir, thank you. I think you have expressed my thoughts of this poem completely Jan, thank you and Gemini! James, thank you as always Marina |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Loved it Marina... You really cought my attention with the poem taking place in the "times of swords and shields".. I LOVE movies made about that era. First Knight, Brave Heart... hell too many for me to remember... anyways.. awesome poem. --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Marina~ Your words create such lovely images in my mind and in my heart! I believe that certain souls are always drawn together, and that those who are meant to be will find each other. Very symbolic message you have here, my friend! Lovely!  Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, this was a wonderful poem. . . I've always wondered if lovers have known each other before. . . you have captured that well here. . . Excellent. .. ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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rodger_jr Junior Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 37Glen Hope, PA |
Martina, This really captures how things seem to change after you love. Very nice work. |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Marina, the last line really does it before me. I strongly believe in soulmates and reincarnation. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thanks Dave, I think anyone who has any kind of romance in them seems to like the Medevial Era. Terry, thank you I am glad you liked this one. I was looking for just that when I wrote it Thank you Sven, I believe it is in fact true that we continue to meet each other in everyone of our lives ( if you believe in that as I do) though we are never the same person twice. Roger, thank you and welcome to Passions!!! Tara, thank you, I'm glad you liked it and that I was able to get the meaning across so you could enjoy it. Marina |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Ah, you couldn't keep this LoveBug away from such a love poem for long. Beautiful writing, my friend. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Lovebug, you are so sweet. Thank you Marina |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW, Marina , your writing just keeps getting better and better This is my favorite by you All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thamk you Jeff. Marina |
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