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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I feel shadows enclosing my vision Encircling my sight and fading me fast One last ponder of my indecision I’ll walk through the haze that’s ever to last It is dark here and the ground isn’t flat Up a hill and down a valley I go I’ve faith in my pocket and love 'neath my hat A twig in the ground could sprawl me just so It’s cold in the cavern blackness surrounds me I will leave nothing but prints on the walls And when some soul saddens they found me They’ll be too far for one to answer their calls The sudden change of elation comes forth The cavern’s still there but is hidden quite well You’ll see me clicking my heels toward North Migration is instinct this condition is hell |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Walt!! This is wonderful...I think it's one of your best. You described your emotions perfectly. Keep writing, sir!  |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
A real keeper here Walt....Emotional movement at its best A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Have a brew on me TexasWalt. I have to tell you I admire the line: "I’ve faith in my pocket and love 'neath my hat" that's real down home to me... If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ I'm reminded of 'I can see clearly now' Nicely done - I liked David's line of 'emotional movement' I think that says what I also found in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys i was feelin a bit down but i think im better already yuh |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, very well done, Walt! I'm glad that you are feeling better now! Denise |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you denise im just too serious here lately |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Great work here walt, I couldnt even comprehend the emotional rollercoaster you have to live with. Glad yer feeling better now though. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow...*clicking her heels and joining the North Migration*.....wow! |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Walt - you should be serious more often, it has inspired a great poem ( and that isn't to say that your less serious poems arn't as good, cause I love them all ) . I really enjoyed reading it and stoping to think for a moment afterwards on what your saying and how it matches my mood perfectly . L.of.L. Tom . Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.- |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I too love the line "faith in my pocket and love under my hat. Excellent!  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Yowsers...I do believe I like this serious side of you  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you all for being supportive and i love the pic white dove |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
May I join your fan club? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm expanding that favorite part to the whole second stanza, my friend... The "twig on the ground" is pretty darned good as well..  |
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