A New Horizon - Attempt One for Jeffery & Lone Wolf's challenge

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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2000-05-15 01:07 PM

Hi friends, this is my first one out of maybe many for the same topic, I hope that you don't get mad at me for posting more.

All the same this is a great topic to write about. It surely gives any one a huge motivation to look at the brighter side of life and look perspectively at the horizon with hope instead of despair....

Prologue:

    A drizzle,
    Droplets of rain,
    My mind in a puzzle,
    Obscured by dark clouds of pain.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    A ray,
      a single ray from the dazzling
        sun,
    Offered light
      to the falling
        droplets,
    A delightful
      rainbow, seven-coloured
        one,
    Sky clouded,
      a colourful dusk dawned,
        triplets.

Yesterday, today and tomorrow,
A triad in one's life, offering
A triplet of pain, hurt and sorrow,
A trio of peace, comfort and loving.

    The sky now,
      out there, I saw
        shine,
    Brightly,
      with carefree
        abandon,
    Shackles of
      distrust, nerves,
        pain,
    With the coloured sky
      have now been
        broken.

Widening scope,
Clearing the eyes of my soul,
Don't need anymore a rope,
To get me out of this hole.

    Nature,
      it seemed, had a
        way,
    Of telling,
      showing the path of
        life,
    All it needed
      is a single
        ray,
    To clear this
      muddled head, obscured by
        strife.

In this age, where violence is rife,
Distances shortened, yet man stays afar,
A brief moment, the rainbow does inspire,
In me, trying to win this war.

    I feel,
      I am
        winning,
    My confused head
      has stopped
        spinning,
    I am back
      to my own
        reasoning,
    I see the clear
      wide horizon
        broadening

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Epilogue:

    The sun shines on the righteous one,
    Widening a new horizon,
    Fortune smiles on the brave one,
    Throwing shining rays from the sun...

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Life is like a painting,
That in an art gallery is left hanging,
Though many come just to look at it,
A very few actually come to enjoy it.

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 05-15-2000).]

Jeffrey Carter

Member Elite

since 2000-04-08

Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!

1 posted 2000-05-15 06:05 PM

WOW challenge exceeded!!!

Post as many as you want m'friend.

That's yhe point of this challenge ....to get people to examine their lives in a new light...count their blessings so to speak

by the way ....still working on the storyline and setting of 63 hours....been really busy lately , but i promise i will get back to you

All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep

netswan
Senior Member

since 2000-03-28

Posts 1369
Washington

2 posted 2000-05-15 06:08 PM

Sudhir, this is lovely and certainly
makes for a great new horizon topic.

netswan

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2000-05-15 09:10 PM

Sudhir...
Wow!! Two poems!! Great work!! Challenge well met once again!!!

LW

Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-05-16 12:15 PM

Sudhir,
this is EXCELLENT...
love the presentation,
you displayed these well written thoughts
very creatively and the rain metaphors are perfect.
great work!!
jm

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

5 posted 2000-05-16 03:41 AM

Jeffery, netswan, Lone Wolf, Janet,

I am sorry for not thanking each of you separately , I am having a lot of PC troubles lately...

But all the same, I would like to thank you for your continuous support in my effort to make my poetic skills work by reading them and posting your views.

I really feel that this topic has a lot of exploring to be done, and hence I might just come up with another one or maybe more...

I hope you like them too, as you liked this one..

Regards,
Sudhir.

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 05-16-2000).]

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2000-05-16 05:47 AM

This has a very soothing style and flow Sudhir, I very much enjoyed the read! Nicely done ...

Best wishes,
/Kit

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

7 posted 2000-05-16 02:07 PM

Thank you kit. You have been very encouraging.

Thanks once again,
Regards,
Sudhir

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