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When Death Comes Knocking
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When Death Comes Knocking |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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When Death Comes Knocking When death comes knocking do not pine for me For I will be upon contentment’s throne And savor dainty nectar of the bee The sweet of God’s abundant Honeycomb The stars and moons will take me in embrace And cast their subtle beams across my cheek Inscribing humbleness upon my face That God may bless this spirit poor and meek In fragrace of God’s garden I will dwell And though it seems that life from earth departs As honey flows forever from the bee I thus will live forever in your hearts If tears will set discomfort’s sorrow free Mourn for yourselves, but never weep for me Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 05-16-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Beautiful sentiment, tough times, you all are in my prayers... |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
"Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, Thank you dear, for your comments. I didn't mean this sonnet to be a sad poem. It is a reflection of how I view death. It is meant to be a calming poem Thanks Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
White Knight, Thank you for your comments. This is only a thought about how I feel, not about anything that is happening in my life. It's just a poem. Thanks Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Elizabeth: This is lovely... |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This poem has left me with one huge mix of emotion: I found it sad yet soothing, calming but moving. The tears it brought me within are a delicate mixture of all the feelings this poem has inspired in me. Lovely poem, Liz. You and Tony are in my prayers, may God be with you both. Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very beautiful and contrary to some of the responses here, I found this uplifting, with a positive outlook. Corinne |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Southrn, Thank you dear, Take care Lizzie, Thanks for your remarks. I'm glad it was soothing to you Corinne, Your interpretation is the mirror of my sentiments. Thank you for recognizing my positive outlook. Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Elizabeth, this is a beautifully well written, exquisite sonnet! It is soothing and peace producing. It is a similar theme to one that I wrote last night that I will post shortly. You are getting quite expert with this sonnet thingie.....hehehe  Denise |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Liz~ Very moving and strong poem. I love the feeling that I get from this one. It IS a very calming poem, and I feel the same way about death, myself. In fragrace of God’s garden I will dwell And though it seems that life from earth departs As honey flows forever from the bee I thus will live forever in your hearts If tears will set discomfort’s sorrow free Mourn for yourselves, but never weep for me Very good! I love this!!! Love Ya~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz...beautifully done poem...perfect feel to the flow...I wish I saw death with such sweet clarity. Hugs! |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A beautiful sonnet Elizabeth. I think this should be printed out and hung in every hospice in the world. It is such a lovely, soothing poem.... take care...  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Lizzy - this is absolutely perfect...maybe the second time I have labelled a poem such. It IS calming, and brave, and sad and many many things. Love K |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Elizabeth, This is a beautiful sonnet. I loved the first and the last two lines When death comes knocking do not pine for me .... If tears will set discomfort’s sorrow free Mourn for yourselves, but never weep for me Sheer strength of character shines through this one. Right positive attitude, it wreaks of and leaves one in a frame of mind that keeps thoughts lingering on.... Regards, sudhir Life is like a painting, That in an art gallery is left hanging, Though many come just to look at it, A very few actually come to enjoy it. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
An amazing way to look at death, fantastic images, that was very beautiful. "If tears will set discomfort’s sorrow free Mourn for yourselves, but never weep for me" a powerful and perfect ending. I heard a quote, Woody Allen I think, "it is not death I fear only dying" |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Very Beautiful poem Elizabeth!!! Pefectly written LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Hey Liz, don't forget, they'll be a little rainbow about to welcome you as well.. But not just yet, doors don't open till 11am...sorry, absurd humour but I know you'll understand.. HUSG...keep going sweetheart.. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise, It's so wonderful to see you writing so much. Keep the ink flowing.It's wonderful. I'm glad you liked the sonnet, Queen of Sonnets. Thanks Terry, And I found your remarks soothing as well, Thank you so much Martie, I don't think anybody sees death clearly, but I don't believe it's something to fear. Thanks, dear PDV, Thank you. I am not familiar with the Hospice program but understand that it is very worthwhile Kamla, A "perfect" from you is better than winning an Oscar, or Album of the Year, or even an Olympic Gold Metal, because I admire your poetry so much. A humble thank you to one who examines all aspects of life with microscopic thought. Sudhir, I enjoyed reading your response. Thanks so much Brian, I really enjoyed your Woody Allen quote, And thank you for your kind remarks Becky, Thanks so much. Glad you liked it Rainbow, Suppose we just make a date to meet there, OK? I'll look for a rainbow and you look for a little lost soul. Let's do lunch! Love ya Liz |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
How beautifully this has been done! Prior to my grandfather passing I never thought of death as a comfort...but he made me see death as not something to fear or as an END...more of a beginning, I have even been to a funeral that was actually a "celebration" it was the most beautiful thing I had ever seen. Thank you for helping me to remember that |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Liz, So peaceful and serene are the feelings I have after reading this. It is beautiful. Please know tha you and Tony are in my thoughts and prayers. Take Care, LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Butterflies, Sounds like your grandfather was at peace with himself, and I think that is so important, for death is truly not an end. Thank you Lone wolf, Your comments are very warming.I did write this with positive feelings. Thank you Liz |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I thought this was very well done with a sentiment I totally agree with. Wonderful as asual Liz. Marina |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Liz: You're on, let's make it noon and then we can have hors d'oeuvre (just cause a door is open, doesn't mean you have to go through it..*g*..by the way, I like a flakeless sole, you could have joined me for smoked, (that means heaven sent) mackerel this evening...*g*...ok, I'll shutup now,... I'm off to bed...hug that pillow tight or Denise will use it to pick up homeless leaves.. HUSG ps: My way is to laugh through the bad times, in case anyone thinks I'm being thoughtless and uncaring, I'm not, I just disguise my tears well. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
hehe. I love to see someone else have to say "It's just a poem". Very well done, Elizabeth....and points well taken. The grief is always borne by those left behind, not the departee. I admire the cultures that celebrate one's passage as a bittersweet, yet happy, occasion. You are very gifted.... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
marina,Your remarks are so much appreciated. Thank you Rainbow, Smoked makeral? Ugh! Anyway, I never said there aren't tears, There are always lots to go around, but I like to also laugh through har times Balladeer, We think alike, my friend. Thank you Liz |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Oh, Liz... this is a beautiful poem. Death isn't such a terrible thing... thank you for reminding us! Love you! -LoveBug "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Liz my first thought was sadness. But after reading it in its entirety you've described a beautiful passing! And Balladeer's right! It is mourned by those left behind. Even near death experiences will tell ya they didn't want to come back here. Beautiful job! <*\\\>< Our background and circumstances may have influenced who we are, but we are responsible for who we become. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
im glad yuh know that it will all work out to God's will either way it will soon be allright love you i do |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Lovebug, Thank you, dear. Sometimes it can be terrible, if we lose a child, for instance, sometimes it is incomprehensible, but for someone who has lived their life, it isn't so terrible. We can't always understand what God does. Whitedove, It is certainly more painful for us , the living, I believe. Thanks Wayoutwalt. Thank you for your comments Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is beautiful....and I guess death is terrible when you are the one left behind. Loved this!!! Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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