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Friendship Fantasies |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648
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I tell myself it’s no big deal That I don’t hear from you But hurt is what I really feel And don’t know what to do. My offering, so simply wrought, By you is cast behind; With sore rejection I have fought Its ravages unkind. Without a thought of selfish gain Your friend I tried to be And only hoped that I’d obtain Some common courtesy. I hear your message loud and clear -I’m just not worth your time; So now I shed another tear For lack of sharing’s rhyme. Your doorstep I will darken not Again with pleasantries; Sheer ignorance at last has shot Down friendship fantasies. Perhaps one day you’ll need a song To fill the void left where The sweetest music once played strong -Back when you didn’t care. I wish you well upon that day When silence comes your way. Denise |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
When a friend turns their back on you, you can be extremely painful. sometimes we misjudge people and fail to see that they are not being truthful about themselves. We are often better off without these people. You speak hard truth, I hope that you were not hurt too badly. Great poem. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
D, this was quite a lovely piece it rings so much truth to how things can be, thankyou for sharing it with me. CocoBaci |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
There is a lot of pain in this poem. Beautifully written. I am so sorry. |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
So sorry to hear this but it is beautifully written Your work is wonderful!!!! SMILE!!! LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Denise, there is much power in this verse...although loss of friendship is always a sad thing, you've told of it with such magnificent grace  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Denise you have made me think of a friend that I just recently lost...she was an angel and she chose not to be mine...a bittersweet lesson...I am hurt because she chose not to be my friend but I love her for the time she gave to me. If I look at it from my perspective I can understand...if the feelings are not in someones heart how can they be given or shared. James |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Denise, What a fabulous job you did writing this and I could feel your pain very strongly. Sometimes people are blind to see what sits right before their eyes. Here's a smile from me cause I know your a special person. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you Brian, Coco, Rosemary, Becky, Ruth, James and Gloria for reading and for your kind comments. They are always appreciated! Denise |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
Denise ~ Beautifully written as always! It's hurtful when you put so much into a friendship only to be taken for granted. I can relate to this very well... you described it to a "T" ~Kelly  ~Kellsue Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you for reading and for your kind commments, Kelly! Yes, it is very painful, isn't it? Everything in life that is thrown our way can either defeat us or make us stronger. I'm getting pretty strong!!  Denise |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
No one who knows the wonderful person you are inside could ever ignore you....and anyone who doesn't recognize that doesn't know you at all..... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
denise... this is so well written and expressed your pain is evidnet but at the same time so is your strength to rise above it and move on...not to let this person do this again... those last two lines are awesome! strong writng here by you! take care, jm |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Denise...Oh my goodness..I think we know the same person!! Goodbye doesn't hurt as much as "nothing" does it...you captured every raw emotion exactly!! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Awww, sweetie~ Great big *HUGS* ... it would be someone's loss to lose your friendship. Count the friends you've got ... whew ! 'Bout as many as your posts ! We know how important friends are ... but even the loss of one is incalculable. *HUGS* hon ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Sad poem, but very true. Friendships sometimes take those kind of turns. I've never purposely turned my back on any friends, but have lost touch. I wonder if that is not the same thing sometimes. What is also tragic is when you try to be friens with a new friend, and they don't receive it well...especially when you've done nothing wrong to make them stay away. Nothing can deter a poet, for he is actuated by pure love. Who can predict his comings and goings? "Thoreau" |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Dear Denise, Such a beautiful poem about such a hurtful experience. I could use this right now with a "friend" of mine. "I hear your message loud and clear - I'm just not worth your time"....Ouch. You have such a sweet heart, I can't imagine anyone not being thankful for your friendship. Bonnie |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
You've shared this in such a beautiful way. Your poem's rhythm flows beautifully, and your words touch deep into my heart of similar memories ... wonderful poem! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Balladeer, Janet Marie, Butterflies, Marge, Temptress, Bonnie and Kit for your warm and wonderful replies! Denise |
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