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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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Frustration Two lawn chairs and two good friends Sitting in the midnight breeze alone The storefront lights have long since died And the pretty girls have all gone home The first friend, Tim, flicks his cigarette And searches for his favorite star There are so many up there he says "Why does Jesus need to be so far" "I shall save myself," he laughs tonight And raises high upon the chair He free falls to the pavement hard And curses God for not being there Jack the silent type cant help but laugh No hand stretched to his would be brother Tim gets up and curses God once more Jack always winced afraid he’d smother Tim and Jack two childhood best friends Both could have served the Mighty King One says too much but does not believe The other believes but just says nothing [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 05-11-2000).] |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Wowzers Walt!!! There's some food for thought in this one! Really enjoyed this post. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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WolfsMate Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 121New York |
Awesome!! "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near" |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx wild and wolf yuh i apprecite much yur comments |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Walt you are amazing, this poem has a marvelous message, great job.  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx losty yur sweet for sayin so o yuh |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
you have a great style, simple and straightforward, it seems, but always with a deeper meaning...this one is very real very honest,very well written...I like! [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 05-15-2000).] |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Wow, Walt - this is wonderful! It really touched me! So, since imitation is the sincerest form of flattery, I'd like to try to thank you in your own style: makes ya think, yuh, yuh!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Frustration is right bud! One who don't believe and one who says nothing at all. Hmmn, what were you doing? |
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Tom26 Junior Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 30 |
Good one Walt. This poem is really well written. Work like you don't need the money, Love like you've never been hurt,and dance like nobody's watching- Anonymus |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i'm tryin on some one yuh and they dont wanna believe and its frustrating yuh i just wish that "tim" woulda had less "jacks" in his life is all |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey there,...I'm a bit new to this room and still getting to know people (names to poems etc). Your name is catchy...your posts are great. I liked this post lots...got me thinking..look forward to reading more of your work. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
well thank yuh spitfire that was mighty nice of yuh to say and welcome to passions this is the best site ever o yuh! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! This one packs a powerful punch, Walt. Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've hit upon a delicate subject with this one Walt!!! Many are in one catogory or the other...hopefully more will believe AND admit to it!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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