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The Director of the Dance
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The Director of the Dance |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Director of the Dance In a song, suddenly there is you directing the dance, swiftly like a rising curtain locked together swaying is that fragile moment still lit and languid and poised forever in grace. Circling memories wooden floor the rhythm is captured in your closed eyes and I can feel the warm wisp curling near my ear move to your whispered sweet breath. The melody is a laugh tangled in night’s caprice where the curve of your lip decides the hour dawning, as a flash of color stirs then flows across my bare shoulder where I was cold and now am warm. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
And may I have the next dance M'lady...? wonderfully written Martie. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Gracefully done, Martie. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Martie! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Just so sensual and soft. 'I can feel the warm wisp curling near my ear move to your whispered sweet breath' Lovely thoughts from a lovely lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
M~ I wonder if you would mind posting this at the "Critical" analysis forum. Have some flea-sized quibbles that I think would make this a better poem. It's up to you of course but I promise not to throw a dart at you! best regards, bboog |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--The next dance is yours! deers are more graceful--what a nice thing to say. Thanks lovely Denise. Thank you Marge for a lovely reply. bboog--Thanks for the read. Passions discourages posting the same poem in more then one forum....but maybe I'll go over there one day with another. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
really beautiful...soft and touching  |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Martie, This is so beautiful, makes me want to find a dance partner and sway the night away. Loved it, thank you, Cerenity |
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