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When I Look At You
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When I Look At You |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
I thought I needed a change - something sweet! When I Look At You Lori LockHeart A single rose stands taller Than the other few, Without any thorns at all, When I look at you. The stars shine so brightly, Twinkling all night through. They never seem so far away, When I look at you. A single teardrop falls tenderly, From the painful midnight blue. It doesn't really hurt so much, When I look at you. I see a love that's real, One to last my whole life through. It warms my heart and fills my soul, When I look at you. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh girl, I think you've got it bad, like I do!  Maybe we can share antidote, 'eh? "When I look at you..." aaahhh. When it's love, that's all it takes! You've done beautifully with this one! If you're like me, you don't want "cured" of this anytime soon!  (throwing antidote over shoulder!)  |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
BEAUTIFUL!! That's how love between two should be.  ~Kellsue Reflect upon your present blessings-of which every man has many-not on your past misfortunes, of which all men have some. ~Charles Dickens We make a living by what we get, but we make a life by what we give. ~Winston Churchill |
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Tom26 Junior Member
since 2000-05-07
Posts 30 |
lori- I had to stop reading this midway because it brought back so many memories I've had. Never stop writing. -tom To know you can't have something makes it that much more desirable. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
.gif) Lori* This is written with beauty and grace, and from a heart that has felt love. Thank you so much for sharing this side of your heart as well.Hold me for yesterday Kiss me for tomorrow But love me for today. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Soft and tender thoughts. James |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Lori-- This was so beautiful hon!! Written with a heart pure of love. Sweet sentiments indeed. Keep them coming, and i'll keep reading! take care, amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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redwriter1 Member
since 1999-07-22
Posts 480Franklin, TN |
Excellent pictures.!.. Roses.. standing tall... mmmm yup.. that's love alright!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and sweet it tis... love this little gem... wonderful imagery hey your pretty good at this poetry stuff later-lori gator jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Really wondeful Lori!! I can feel the feelings (?) of love in this one. . . simply beautiful! Excellent, my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very beautiful, love is that way isn't it? all things fade in comparison. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Now I really like that. Beautiful piece. Well written. I love the flow it has. Love IS wonderful, isn't it? j. |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Wow. This is awesome! Must be a great place to be. It' been a while for me, but reading this porm almost made my heart flutter again. =) Thanks. --Dave< !signature--> "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott [This message has been edited by WhiteNite (edited 05-12-2000).] |
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REBECCA ALLYN Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 91Lima,Ohio |
Man girl are you good or what??!! it seems true though, you do have it bad LOTS of LUV, Becky |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Gurl, you got it goin! CocoBaci |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Ah, I love this poem... so romantic. It's wonderful to find love. Good job! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Tuck Junior Member
since 2000-04-29
Posts 27 |
oh, yea! how beautiful! isn't it great to have angels in our lives? |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I loved your tie-in line Lori. This was beautifully done ... a wonderfully romantic verse ... sigh ... Best wishes, /Kit |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
And when I look at you I see poetic verse so true Described feelings, in tenderness and love Serene, like the flight of a dove above The rose, my favourite for certain I hope I can read more What’s behind your poetic curtain Thank you for brighten my night Enlighten it with stary light The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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lorilockheart Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 206Alabama |
Thanks to all of you. You don't know how much I appreciate all your wonderful comments. It touches my heart! Thanks! Lori ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope you still feel small when you stand beside the ocean. Whenever one door closes I hope one more opens. Promise me you'll give faith a fighting chance. And when you get the choice to sit it out or dance - I hope you dance. song by LeeAnn Womack ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Lori, Wonderful...I can feel the love...so bright and true, my friend. Excellent!! LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Lori, beautiful. I, too, have a poem called When I Look At You, written many years ago, and I'm only jealous that mine was no were near as pretty as yours. Stay with it... j. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Well stop looking at me.....LOL J/K this is very lovely and drips with the sweetness of honey A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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vphantom Junior Member
since 2000-05-13
Posts 23 |
Hi, I am new to the forum but I think your poems was absolutely beautiful. Take care. Vphantom |
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