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~ Moonlit Altar ~
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~ Moonlit Altar ~ |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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~ Moonlit Altar ~ Upon the altar, there she lay a breathless offering, slow decay Her heart, nay beating eyes of tears She closed her thoughts & cursed her fears... Around her, trees stood dark & tall to witness ghostly, now her fall Around her hair spilled like her eyes Locks of love and tears of lies... Nay, she only wanted love - but she was meant to fly above In darkened sky with whippoorwill and moonlit kisses born of chill... Nay, the lords now cursed her breath and rose to laughter in her death How she longed to hold their heart Alas, her body torn apart. Upon the altar, there she lay She drank of love, and died that day. Final breath and none did falter, Spit upon her moonlit altar... July 1999 - May 2000 * So mode it be * |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
sad but beautiful |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Thank you Robert. If anyone understands, you do. I am sad and beautiful, aren't I?  j/k  "Laugh and the world laughs with you..." cry, and you're all alone. My version - pFF |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Wow! That sure was a great poem.  Very sad, but beautiful none the less. That was by far one of my favorite poems written in a long time. "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
So sad  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Nay, she only wanted love - but she was meant to fly above In darkened sky with whippoorwill and moonlit kisses born of chill... --------------- what a cool verse... wow- this is a beauty... very nice my girlie girl. later gen-gator jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving How one move just puts me by myself There you go just trusting someone else Now I know I put us both through hell ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me And I'm not sayin We ever had the right to hold on I just didn't wanna let you get away from me. ~MB20~Leave |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Powerful Gen, the sadness just comes from these words. . . the sacrifices that we all make. . . Excellent. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
im soooo sad and lonely sad and lonely sad and lonely ....wowza is the word for this poem yuh |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ah...we shall have to get together for Solstice...smiles---think I am safely crossed off the sacrificial list...lol... Great work, here, femme. Singing me song... |
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danny Junior Member
since 2000-05-09
Posts 18 |
beautiful and heart rending |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I always seem to find myself looking back upon your work and there I find the finest of writings...and this writing stands as proof that your work is of the highest degree. Well done PFF A man does not love a woman because she is beautiful...But she is beautiful because he loves her. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Dawn Eclipse - - Thank you. I don't write "dark" poetry often, as I prefer to look to the brighter side of life, but occasionally I do splurge. When I do, it feels pretty good. Ruth - - Even in sadness, one can rejoice. Always remember that girl. Janet - - Probably my favorite stanza too.  So glad you're always here girl! Sven - - True. Sometimes sacrifices are made & we don't understand what for. I truly believe that someone higher up is there to "move" us when we head in the wrong direction, and sometimes it's a painful "move", but always for the best. Walt - - hehe Glad you were "wowzered".... serenity - - Lucky for you! LOL I've been crossed off the sacrificial list and added to a new one instead... It never ends...danny - - *curtsies* and a big thank you! First Knight - - Wow, quite a compliment sir! I'm quite honored to know you "look me up".... Thanks to each and every one! It's amazing to me how many forks and valleys and hills there are in life, and wow, I'm just about exhausted from the hike! Which is why I decided to lay down on this here altar....sheesh. Anyway, thank you all! "Laugh and the world laughs with you..." cry, and you're all alone. My version - pFF |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Ok Gen, time to get up off that altar and see the gifts that you've really got. . . the sacrifices have been made and it's time to move on. . . You can do it. . . you've already begun. . . ------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Amen |
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